If I had a hammer, I would smash it
on your pumpkin patch, think it is your head
all blood and gore, a pulp, beauty to behold.
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a nail, essential in the centre of that wall
for your photo to be displayed for all
If I had a hammer, I would hit hard
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AppleHouse Poetry Workshop: 10/10/10: 3 lines, 10 syllables each
Saturday Centus: If I had a hammer
I'd stay away if you had a hammer! Very expressive.
ReplyDeleteYour hammer is your words - very powerful..Jae
ReplyDeleteVery strong words for a very powerful object! Good work!
ReplyDeleteIf I had a hammer, I would smash it on your pumpkin patch ... this made me laugh despite the blood and gore! great SC :o)
ReplyDeleteQuite the powerful statement with this offering. I feel the frustration and anger and I feel for the pumpkin, oh the hammer wrath! Great writing!
ReplyDeleteaww! that's hitting hard.. :)
ReplyDeleteyou seem to have some pent up hostility. hope you resolve the issue before you find my pumkin patch
ReplyDeleteHard stuff. Hardrock, somehow. Related to Gospel ;-)
ReplyDeleteBest wishes
Ralf
Wow!! Better the pumpkin that the real deal...I like your style...Peace and blessings
ReplyDeleteYIKES! I was a bit scared! Well done though
ReplyDeleteWe'd make a fierce team with our hammers! I'm sticking with you.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece.
xoRobyn
I feel for the pumpkin!
ReplyDeleteInteresting use of the prompt
ReplyDeleteInteresting poetic style. I like it.
ReplyDeleteAs for smashing things, I think you've got that one covered pretty well too!
My goodness, the first part is kind of violent. I like the second part though. Thanks for stopping by my blog.
ReplyDeleteWow!
ReplyDeleteSounds like your not too happy with someone, ha. Very powerful and interesting.
ReplyDeleteNice poem(s).
ReplyDeleteIt is clear by your SC-post that this prompt is also very useable in poetry. Works well, even if it is a bit violent. (Somebody seems to need some 'anger-management' here!)
Thank you so much for your kind words on my SC-post. With all this encouragement I may try to write a short story. It can't hurt to give it a try.
Nice to meet you. I am now a follower of your blog.
Best wishes,
Anna
For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's SC Week 23
Hold it, let me have my say, then you can do as you like with the hammer :) !
ReplyDeleteI liked it.
Now, crash.....
Very well done, I could feel the rage. Nice twist on the prompt. Kat
ReplyDeleteMethinks it's a very good thing you don't have a hammer!
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You should do somethink about your temper really!
ReplyDeleteAnother groovy idea for 10-10-10...nicely done :)
ReplyDeleteWell who rattled your cage then? I even noticed some very carefully chosen words in the preceding comments to avoid offending you further.
ReplyDeleteWhatever the unseen motivation for such a powerful piece, it still captured the pent up feelings of your narrator so well.
I confess that today, I really like that first one, and I probably shouldn't think too much, or it would give me ideas. Excellent writing!
ReplyDeleteOh so powerful is your hammer.
ReplyDeleteNicely written.
Love it! I've been known to break a dish or two but smashing a pumpkin sounds like a lot more fun!
ReplyDeletePowerfully and evocatively written.
Thanks for linking up.
smash away, my dear! i used to buy breakables from the dollar store to smash with a hammer. i was grieving my husband's death and working through the anger stage. it helped!
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