I hunt for it
not finding it anywhere
where are thou muse-
where have you hidden
when I need you the most
randomly distributed
I gather that in my thoughts
rejoicing again
in the word painting
on my palette of emotions
cracked surface of the earth
laughs at my naïveté
soar is getting sour
curdled milk is better
at least you make cottage cheese
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....5 lines where the middle line acts as a pivot, i.e. it can be read in conjunction with the first two lines, or it can be read as the line that leads into the final two. I have tried to do that in each stanza of this verse. Hope it works!
Very interesting poem. The cottage cheese is quite the surprise ending.
ReplyDeleteyes i agree with Teresa. the ending was really rejoicing. hidden muse brought out a lovely verse!
ReplyDeleteLiked your palette of emotions, liked even the curdled soar :)
ReplyDeletenice touch ........
ReplyDeleteGreat ending.
ReplyDeleteWell written and very clever, I really liked it!
ReplyDeleteLove the words "soar is getting sour"! Your palette of emotions reflects the creative spirit seeking new pastures! beautiful!
ReplyDeleteA wonderful piece, with an excellent surprise at the end! =)
ReplyDelete-Weasel
Clever response to the prompt!
ReplyDeletePamela
Interesting pivot effect. I think it worked quite well.
ReplyDeleteLoved this style of Haiku with a central pivot line. Very interesting and liked the way it connected. Excellent!!
ReplyDeleteThis is so cleverly written and I love the way it ended.
ReplyDeleteI just watched the opening ceremony of the Commonwealth Games and thought of you!
You have done great with this experimental poem..middle line works so well...ah, doesn't it happens in life too..Thanks Gautami..newer heights in creativity every day..
ReplyDeleteyummy treat,
ReplyDeletelove the special favors in your work...
beautiful contribution!
share 3 poems with us within 60 hours... how cool!
ReplyDeletelove to see you in our place.
stay beautiful all the way.
love it!
ReplyDeletesimply beautiful play with words! well done!
ReplyDeleteRejoice (Haiku)
cottage cheese ;)
ReplyDeletenicely done!
loveNlight
Gabi
Interesting Poem
ReplyDeleteha...i really like those last 2 lines...
ReplyDeleteFrom "soar is getting sour" to "... make cottage cheese": really turns the poem.
ReplyDeleteNice touch, cottage cheese. Thinking of writing about the muse myself. Sometimes my brain is curdled too.
ReplyDeletePerfect word-painting. Very nicely done, my friend.
ReplyDeleteVictoria
Wow, very creative!
ReplyDeleteyes, you write beautiful emotions simply... Liked it.
ReplyDeleteॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Another good one, Gautami. I like "word painting on my palette of emotions", and "cracked surface of the earth laughs at my naivete". Wonderful lines that lead to "cottage cheese." That's something I can certainly relate to. Thanks again,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Love the way you turn words back onthenselves. Clever.
ReplyDeletesupport us by visiting a few poets near your entry.
ReplyDeletethanks for the contribution…
here is one of mine:
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/10/04/what-can-you-see/
I enjoyed the pivot points; I felt the poem moving and changing direction. Beautiful as always, Gautami!
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