corners I have covered
with statues which stand tall
a flower vase with a fragile flower
looks soulfully at me
I never had noticed its rampant growth
I touch it gently
feels its tremors
the photo frame from the shelf
falls on the floor
the wooden corners are chipped
I pick the pieces from the floor
set back the photo frame on the shelf
tremors are gone now
my gentleness soothes the flower
its rampant growth is stopped
it still touches my soul
the fragile vase will hold it still
statues will watch indulgently
I will still have my corners covered
very delicate piece. wonderful use of the words.
ReplyDeleteHow clever to have used the prompts twice- it was like a flower uncurling then curling up again..Jae
ReplyDeleteAlong with your poem, I am so happy to read very creative comments by jaerose.. befitting to your use of words..reading you is a constant pleasure..thanks Gautami!
ReplyDeleteI like the way you used two meanings of the word corners...
ReplyDeleteNice...I agree with jaerose too...thank you for sharing this.. :)
ReplyDeleteAs always, a beautiful use of the words. It's a joy to come to your site.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of the prompt. I love the last line. Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written and I love the last too, wonderful.
ReplyDeleteI'm not a huge poetry buff but I really enjoyed the ebb and flow of this. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteone of your most perfect pieces g.. the subtle reflection of breathing living life on a shelf in a vase... that's how is saw it... change me
ReplyDeleteHi Gautami, beautiful touch as ever!
ReplyDelete<3 Andy
as usual it's both beautiful and unique
ReplyDeleteYou too chose the topic of latent energy. Well done!
ReplyDeleteyou have that miracle touch in your words.Loved your poem!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this and loved the last line, it bought it all together and finished it so well.
ReplyDeleteMy 3WW
Gautami, so lovely to read your piece. I goofed and used "rampart" instead of "rampant"!
ReplyDeleteDouble use of words, you smarty, you are so good with prompts. This flows beautifully. Thanks, G.
Amy BL
lovely!!
ReplyDeleteI really like the way the first stanza sets the scene; a living tableau.
ReplyDeleteA great idea, a different twist on the prompt. The word Tremor invoked a fear of earthquakes in this context, so I hope you are from that danger.
ReplyDeleteI love the scene, the story, and I'm still pondering why you need to have your corners covered. Thought provoking.
ReplyDeleteI could feel the earthquake shaking the shelf. Be well.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the comment on my short blog. My writing has moved to the concrete for a while at least. Stop by. http://www.retireinstyleblog.com
b
another stunning post ! love it :)
ReplyDeletei love the different ways this poem can be interpreted. beautiful.
ReplyDeleteJP/deborah
Love the in and out movement and use of corners. The last line is great,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Really enjoyed this--how you had a sort of descending/ascending cadence to it. Beautifully written.
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Ah, the directions you've chosen worked wonderfully well! A fine read, as usual...
ReplyDeleteLovely writing once again! I like how you began and ended with the covered corners.
ReplyDeleteI like the ideas here of what we watch and what watches us, among the tremors.
ReplyDeleteHeyy
ReplyDeleteSo very creative and intelligent.
When you said 'I bend the rules' I wondered how and hopped over.
And IM glad I was curious.
The concpet of Naisaiku poetry utilised in such an exquisite way.
This is brilliant poetry!
I like the circling back, how every act seems like an incantation.
ReplyDeleteits like a wave .....well written Gautami.
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