on their skins-
a hint of hard work
those play of muscles
on their forearms-
a hint of hard work
the beat of hammer
on the hot iron-
a hint of hard work
we are beautiful people
we only lust for your love
a hint of sadness
they get up to dance-
with masks, and swelling chants-
a hint of abandon
"they are the salt of earth, and I couldn't agree more"
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Three Word Wednesday provided these three words: hint, lust, sheen. Working around those was not easy as I did not wish to go the obvious way. Hope what I did works well.
I have taken a line or two from Ka'Ba by Imamu Amiri Baraka. Those lines are we are beautiful people and dance- with masks, and swelling chants. I have somewhat edited the second line. Do read the full poem clicking on the poet's name. To know more about the poet, check out the following link:
This felt really strong and proud, I really loved it!
ReplyDeletethe repetition really added to the feel of your poem - you could feel the hammer of hard work going up and down..jae
ReplyDeleteNicely flowing and with beautiful lines describing hard labor.
ReplyDeleteI love how you took lines yet made the poem totally your own
ReplyDeleteAlso love how you use "hint"
Lovely piece.
ReplyDeleteNice capture! The repetition works so very well.
ReplyDeleteIn addition to the imagined eye-candy, you delivered very well on the word-candy. Nicely done as usual.
ReplyDeletethe repetition really works for me.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gautami. You are the beautiful people....
ReplyDeletelove the flow...
ReplyDeleteI liked the repetition, and the way you used sheen. A very nice poem.
ReplyDeleteLusting for love, very nice.
ReplyDeleteLusting for love, very nice.
ReplyDeleteYour hinting is lovely.
ReplyDeleteThe enslaved have a beauty in dignity.
ReplyDeleteHint of hard work: more than a hint, I'd say: a rhythmic statement! A very clever poem.
ReplyDeleteI love this poem Gautami!
ReplyDeletePamela
This worked beautifully, Gautami! I loved it.
ReplyDeleteThis was wonderful, Gautami
ReplyDeleteYou ARE one of the beautiful people. I am so PROUD of you for sharing your poem!
ReplyDeleteI have a fondness for repetition and use it fairly often. I really like this piece and how it drives home the point in such a lyrical way.
ReplyDeleteHint of perfection. The poem
ReplyDeleteIt shudnt be hint,,,its all perfection!!Lovely one
ReplyDeletei LUV yr response to this week's big tent poetry... it is important to read the author's poem only because it adds more to yr own individual poem... whether we piggyback or stand alone it is a beautiful piece... especially so again yr response to imamu's poem kaba...
ReplyDeleteThis is a wonderful write. Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteLovely. I could picture the scene from your words.
ReplyDeletequid
I love how similar our thoughts went with this prompt!
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