I swipe the floor twice
still curdled smell of milk persists
I also wipe the tears from her eyes
what if her dress is smeared with dirt
her hair is a ghastly sight
I gently untangle it with my fingers
she wipes her nose in my neck
I smile slightly and kiss her eyes
lead her to her favourite place-
she settles with a bowl of crispies
thumbing her book once in a while
I watch serene smile return to her face
knowing her, if you say
this is the scariest story I've ever heard...
I will totally disagree, as I know
she found clouds in the spilt milk
dragons fought for her,
while unicorns held her hand
now she sits here replete
with another dream in the making
I wonder, what would I find the next moment?
"in that brief moment nirvana emerges out of nowhere"
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I couldn't think of any other title for this. Suggestions are welcome.
Aren't kids just revoltingly gorgeous?
ReplyDeleteA delightful struggle :-)
ReplyDeleteI had to read your poem twice to get it . I'm slow :( It is a very good and happy ending story. I like happy endings.
ReplyDeleteI love the line about seeing clouds in the spilt milk, and the richness of the dragons and unicorns. As far as suggestions for a title: Clouds In Spilt Milk?, I'm not sure, just know that I really like the gentle feel of this one.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Absolutely gorgeous imagery and brilliant telling of how a child's perception of what their imaginations create are so real.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
How about Nirvana Emerges? A fabulous but freaky poem, LOL.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that dragons fight for her and unicorns hold her hand. We all need that.
ReplyDeleteAnd we all need our dreams, wherever they take us.
=)
I love imaginations of kids. I think us adults could use more of it in these days and times. Good job.
ReplyDeleteYour poem is filled with beautiful images. It is amazing where one can go in one's dreams.
ReplyDeletebeautiful madness.
ReplyDeleteI think the title fits it perfectly..I too read it twice, to soak up all the sweetness, curdled milk and all.
ReplyDeleteA lovely post! I thoroughly enjoyed it!
ReplyDeleteSuch a sweet picture of the imagination of a child.
ReplyDeleteNo sense crying over spilt milk. Just a small distraction in a childs day.~Ames
ReplyDeletesuch a lovely and poetic approach to the prompt. Very well done. I love imagery about clouds in milk and the protection of the dragons.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful imagery here. She's floating effortlessly through her imagination.
ReplyDeleteWhat beautiful imagery. "Dragons fought for her, while unicorns held her hand" - simply lovely. Kat
ReplyDeleteGautami,
ReplyDeleteI love images in this poem.
Pamela
children... clumsy, messy riots of what-would-we-ever-do-without-them... ;)
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Each day with a child is a lovely adventure, filled with dragons, unicorns, mucus and spilt milk.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of language. A pleasure to read.
ReplyDeleteJust wonderfully written, I loved this.
ReplyDeletenicely written
ReplyDeleteloved this! especially:
ReplyDeleteshe found clouds in the spilt milk
dragons fought for her,
while unicorns held her hand
how wonderful to be able to see the magic even through the tears...
Second last stanza is AMAZING. Nice write. Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteMy Gosh this was awesome. the innocence and the magic only a child can see only someone who loves them can feel!
ReplyDeleteLove the imagery, the clumsy innocence... the childhood dreams or nightmares... let's go with dreams.
ReplyDeleteNice write.
I love this sweet piece and the way you subtely incorporated the prompt. Well done.
ReplyDeletexoRobyn
A sensory piece. Every word just perfect.
ReplyDeleteSimply beautiful and so true, every word. There are dragons; there are unicorns; everything is mixture of the everyday chores and the fantastic, when you are with a child, as you have so perfectly described in your lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteI am constantly reminded of how differently adults and children percieve time. The days creep along for a four year old, it is an Eternity until Christmas. (I remember thinking this myself when I was a child.) Whereas, for the adult, the weeks race by at lightning speed. "Oh no, it will be Christmas soon! What am I to do? I have nothing ready?!"
My children are growing up too fast. It makes me very sad to see their childhood hurry along... (please remain a child a little longer...) And I am the one to wipe the spillt milk or what ever else that needs mending. I am sometimes overwhelmed by all the little repair-jobs that need to be done: holes in the toes of socks, broken toys, something needs to be sewn, pasted, tied or glued. The fact that I have the time to sit and write, to even put this down in words is only because the children are on an outing with their father. I cannot think very deeply when they are with me. Yes, I think, but I cannot record even a fraction of my thoughts when I am with them. They take almost all my energy and perception.
It is so intense.
I love your poem.
Thank you for sharing it.
A title? Please let me think about it. I'll try to get back with you.
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's & Sara's SC-post Week 25
What a lovely take on the prompt. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI really like the title. Or un-perceptions...Miss Perceptions...
ReplyDeleteI think it's great as it is...
And I think this poem is an amazing TREAT to read on a BOO-tiful Halloween afternoon.
At first I thought you were going a different direction so the whole read was a surprise.
You are an amazing writer.
Wow.
I think I might call it 'Motherlove'...
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