Sunday, 30 October 2011

snaky tales

total darkness
pitch black
which contains eternity
their eyes merge after a while
heat shakes the hearts
slippery slithering bodies
of snakes entangle in knots

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25 comments:

  1. Morning30 October 2011 at 08:01

    tight 160.
    Happy Sunday.

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  2. Brian Miller30 October 2011 at 09:35

    eww...that would be a nightmare to fall into a ball of snakes...

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  3. Daydreamertoo30 October 2011 at 10:25

    Oooo Yuck!

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  4. abthomas30 October 2011 at 10:31

    Loved the macabre image you managed to score into my mind!

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  5. Monkey Man30 October 2011 at 10:59

    I hate snakes, but love this 160. Thanks for playing along.

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  6. zongrik30 October 2011 at 11:14

    i like the image of the eyes. if they merged on dice, that would really mess up the game ;)

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  7. Cheryl30 October 2011 at 11:35

    Creepy.

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  8. Jo30 October 2011 at 11:57

    nightmarish ... you have painted and incredibly vivid picture with so few words.

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  9. beccagivens30 October 2011 at 17:27

    This is the first 160 I've read ... I would rather not meet this hole of darkness!! I know there are those who love snakes, however, I am not one of them.

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  10. Mama Zen30 October 2011 at 17:32

    Excellent!

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  11. Heaven30 October 2011 at 17:56

    scary images i don't want to tangle... happy sunday ~

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  12. Madeleine Begun Kane30 October 2011 at 19:33

    A perfectly unnerving poem that suits this season.

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  13. Ann LeFlore31 October 2011 at 07:52

    excellent scary images and well done Happy Halloween enjoy this day and night
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/30/the-witch-is-transformed/

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  14. Rosemary Nissen-Wade31 October 2011 at 15:10

    What vivid images!

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  15. Sue31 October 2011 at 16:02

    Perfect Halloween fare. Snakes and all!

    =)

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  16. blackswanpoetry31 October 2011 at 19:22

    very cool

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  17. Anna1 November 2011 at 08:15

    So well written! Excellent!
    But so creepy too.
    I see that scene from that Indiana Jones movie where he jumps down into a snake pit. So creepy.

    I am thankful that there are not many snakes in Sweden and none in Northern Sweden.

    Great text. This was not an easy one to do, so you did very very well.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's SC wk 78 'A Study in Black'

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  18. Christine1 November 2011 at 10:04

    don't mind them at all, matting balls for garter snakes are harmless, but I sure wouldn't want to fall into one

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  19. Bethe771 November 2011 at 16:20

    That would not be fun to me. Dont like snakes. Great write
    Blessings

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  20. vivinfrance2 November 2011 at 04:26

    Really creepy, but terrific poem!

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  21. Promising Poets Parking Lot2 November 2011 at 09:12

    fear snakes,

    sharp imagery,smiles.

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  22. mareymercy2 November 2011 at 20:21

    Very nice!

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  23. AfterTim3 November 2011 at 22:18

    You fill so much emotion and imagery in such so words. Not a gift many can boast of. Pleasure reading your work, truly.

    Titus

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  24. Yousei Hime4 November 2011 at 09:06

    The slight ambiguity leads to other naughty thoughts, especially since snakes often mate in congregational balls like that. Nicely written.

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  25. Jenny14 November 2011 at 13:14

    Yikes. I felt very Indiana Jones here.

    Snakes.

    Shudder.

    But really cool writing.

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