Monday, 3 October 2011

wings of fire

I am thankful for the wings
as I circle over the church
don't you remember how I was lost
looking for signs in the concrete jungle
as I trudged alone in the cobbled path
flying is an adventure
the fearful birds give me a wide berth

in my present state I look down,
see myriads of beings fighting for space.
And I fly far away
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38 comments:

  1. barbara3 October 2011 at 09:24

    I like.
    The short lines "flying is an adventure"/ "And I fly far away"--really nice.

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  2. Christine3 October 2011 at 09:28

    fighting for space, that is the feeling in the concrete jungle

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  3. flaubert3 October 2011 at 09:53

    Nice, Gautami. To be able to fly...

    Pamela

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  4. Sherry Blue Sky3 October 2011 at 10:06

    I love this one....well done.

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  5. turtlememoir3 October 2011 at 10:19

    A flying elephant - yes, I imagine the birds would give her a wide berth. :) I like too the part about being lost and looking for signs... In fact, you have humanized the elephant very successfully - except that we (or most of us), unlike her, have not yet discovered the wings on our backs. An exceptional poem, really. Thank you.

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  6. morning3 October 2011 at 10:39

    wow, wings of fire,
    love the idea.

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  7. Brian Miller3 October 2011 at 11:02

    i think i would fly far...

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  8. izzy3 October 2011 at 12:23

    Yup I would give them all a wide berth! thanks-

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  9. nan3 October 2011 at 12:44

    fantastic.

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  10. Helen3 October 2011 at 12:58

    I really like this ..........

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  11. Tumblewords:3 October 2011 at 15:07

    I, too, yearn to fly far away!

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  12. Carrie Burtt3 October 2011 at 17:29

    Beautiful Gautami....:-)

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  13. Kay L. Davies3 October 2011 at 19:14

    I can feel these lines:
    "looking for signs in the concrete jungle
    "as I trudged alone in the cobbled path"

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  14. Anonymous3 October 2011 at 19:21

    Ah! To be able to fly...what a wonderful dream! Well done!

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  15. ShonEjai3 October 2011 at 19:22

    Very well written. The thought of flying is magnificent indeed

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  16. oldegg3 October 2011 at 22:27

    If that elephant asks, I'm with him.

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  17. Kerry O'Connor3 October 2011 at 23:10

    This is a wonderfully imaginative piece.

    Thank you for sharing your work on Real Toads.

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  18. Jinksy4 October 2011 at 01:12

    I bet there's many an elephant who would like to fly away...

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  19. Nanka4 October 2011 at 02:34

    Great combination of three prompts in a short verse. You have said a lot in just a few words!! The elephant saw it all and flew away!!

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  20. Mike Patrick4 October 2011 at 07:25

    Many levels can be read into this poem, Gautami. There is the flying elephant metaphor of course, but it can stand for the many people lost in the concrete jungle. There are those who escape by flying to another part of the world, and there are those who die. As angels, they would circle the church before flying to the eternal home. Truly a lovely poem.

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  21. Ann LeFlore4 October 2011 at 09:35

    Wow great elephants to have wings this is the second poem I read about flying elephants excellent
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/#comment-1370

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  22. Janet4 October 2011 at 11:01

    Fantastic!

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  23. keiths ramblings4 October 2011 at 11:08

    You never cease to surprise me!

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  24. Deborah4 October 2011 at 11:30

    Oooh ... wonderful!

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  25. Caty4 October 2011 at 11:53

    i would love to have wings to fly from the crowded chaos as well! this poem was an adventure :)

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  26. Kristen Haskell4 October 2011 at 12:41

    I would love to experience flight. What a lovely thought.

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  27. brenda w4 October 2011 at 16:54

    leaving the heaviness of gravity behind....

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  28. Jo Bryant4 October 2011 at 17:30

    great writing

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  29. Ann Grenier4 October 2011 at 17:44

    Ah, to fly far away... Love your poem.

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  30. Magical Mystical Teacher4 October 2011 at 17:56

    A whole story in just a few words! I wish I had the grace of this flying one. Alas, I don't!


    My Wordle 24

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  31. Morning4 October 2011 at 19:29

    it is cool to fly,
    keep flying high.

    you rock.

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  32. sayan4 October 2011 at 21:51

    that's what all of us dream of...to fly away....

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  33. Joanne Elliott4 October 2011 at 22:46

    It is amazing when we can gain perspective. Lovely poem.

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  34. Trellissimo4 October 2011 at 23:34

    Up, up and away! :)

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  35. Isabel Doyle5 October 2011 at 00:39

    your lines match the prompt effortlessly

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  36. mjshorts5 October 2011 at 12:06

    A great poem to match these wordle words.
    I can understand why the birds kept out of his way.
    I wish I could sprout wings and fly every time I was lost.

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  37. S. Sharp5 October 2011 at 13:28

    I want to fly too. Beautiful ;)

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  38. Nicholas V.6 October 2011 at 13:49

    Our words have wings and our imagination can make even elephants fly.
    Lovely poem!

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