Sunday, 9 October 2011

alley and valley

music in my mind
flows into yours
intermingling both of us

love clutches my belly

I want to know why
the heart feels that flutter
while I learn you with my body

love clutches my belly

in the essence of you
I fall into overwhelming depths
to rise again to the fore

love clutches my belly

if it goes on like this
I will make that my banner
and post it in an alley
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25 comments:

  1. Mama Zen9 October 2011 at 11:16

    Gorgeous piece!

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  2. seasideauthor9 October 2011 at 12:14

    yes well done.

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  3. tinkwelborn9 October 2011 at 12:26

    very cool poem. I especially I like the closer.
    thanks.

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  4. Jessica Maybury9 October 2011 at 12:36

    this is cool :) I liked the refrain. It's true!

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  5. Shawna9 October 2011 at 13:07

    I love this, especially your first stanza.

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  6. Brian Miller9 October 2011 at 13:08

    while i learn you with my body evokes quite an intimate picture...

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  7. Paige9 October 2011 at 14:53

    "while I learn you with my body".
    - a honest and fulfilling way to
    learn someone.

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  8. zongrik9 October 2011 at 16:54

    the thought of proclaiming your love in an alley...hmmmm...interesting.

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  9. ed pilolla9 October 2011 at 17:37

    make it your banner. i liked this very much:)

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  10. The Orange Tree9 October 2011 at 17:55

    touching and visual.
    love it.

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  11. Mary10 October 2011 at 05:08

    I love this. The repetition works well to enhance your message.

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  12. shawnacymariekiker10 October 2011 at 08:30

    brilliant. this has the feel of a rumi. something exquisite and just slightly above the rails.
    your refrain is amazing and every word in between.
    very much appreciated this, this morning.

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  13. Kerry O'Connor10 October 2011 at 09:19

    It beautiful exploration of love and commitment.

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  14. Morning10 October 2011 at 09:42

    sweet.

    Happy Picnic.

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  15. ShonEjai10 October 2011 at 10:04

    Beautiful poem. I love the first line especially then it just got better from there. Well done

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  16. Helen10 October 2011 at 10:07

    You composed a great poem for Poetry Jam this week!

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  17. Susannah10 October 2011 at 10:45

    I love the repeat of "love clutches my belly." And "while I learn you with my body" is wonderful!

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  18. Sherry Blue Sky10 October 2011 at 11:17

    I especially love "I will make that my banner and post it in an alley."

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  19. Tiaden10 October 2011 at 11:54

    what a great little poem. There seems to be a lot packed into a small space here, brilliant!

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  20. Abin Chakraborty10 October 2011 at 12:10

    fascinating stuff!incisively insightful.

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  21. Abin Chakraborty10 October 2011 at 12:14

    fascinating stuff!incisively insightful.

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  22. Kay L. Davies10 October 2011 at 18:51

    Beautifully done. I love the idea of the banner.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  23. The Bug11 October 2011 at 08:49

    Lovely love poem. My favorite part is the last stanza :)

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  24. Marian11 October 2011 at 09:11

    "love clutches my belly" really says it all. what a lovely line.

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  25. Ann LeFlore12 October 2011 at 08:44

    I hope you do make that banner and post it in the alley that would be great
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/10/the-bird-of-love/

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