Sunday, 10 April 2011

poetic vacuum


yellowed thread of that green balloon
entangles your pauses,
you find vacuum in my knees-
the gap between my feet and ground,
you fill it with sensual poetry.
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24 comments:

  1. Jerry10 April 2011 at 06:35

    wow, tight and inviting. I got sucked in.

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  2. dustus10 April 2011 at 06:51

    Entangles your pauses. Certainly has that feel to it. Enjoyed the way you implement this style. Very effective.

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  3. Monkey Man10 April 2011 at 08:23

    Great flow and rhythm with this Sunday 160. Cool that you combined the two challenges. Thanks for playing along again this week.

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  4. brenda w10 April 2011 at 08:34

    I love the vaccuum. I read your piece before really looking at the picture. See her float afterwards was a delight! Thanks for this Sunday morning treat.
    ~Brenda

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  5. Brian Miller10 April 2011 at 09:30

    wow...you open up quite a can in a few words...big smiles.

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  6. Linda Jacobs10 April 2011 at 10:19

    I love how the yellow thread entangles your pauses and that the gap is filled with sensual poetry!

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  7. quid10 April 2011 at 11:27

    Beautifully illustrated, delicious little poem!

    quid

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  8. Stan Ski10 April 2011 at 11:43

    Gravity defying post!

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  9. flaubert10 April 2011 at 12:03

    Love it, Gautami, perfect to the photo.

    Pamela

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  10. Jingle10 April 2011 at 12:05

    super beautiful.

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  11. Amropali10 April 2011 at 14:08

    i love the way it ends.
    The fun colors and the poetic depth merge beautifully.

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  12. Beachanny10 April 2011 at 14:29

    This, I thought, was an appropriate response to Brendan's poem today. Sensual poetry..filling the spaces. Wonderful piece..I liked "entangles your pauses" too.

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  13. SweetTalkingGuy10 April 2011 at 16:55

    Phew, you got me bouncing off the pavement!

    <3

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  14. Mama Zen10 April 2011 at 17:38

    "Entangles your pauses." That's fabulous.

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  15. Steve Isaak10 April 2011 at 21:34

    Love the first four lines of this: stunning stuff; solid finish.

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  16. jessicasjapes11 April 2011 at 06:30

    Nice phrasing here. You give a little but leave us a lot to add ourselves. Cute!

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/04/11/evolution-in-a-nutshell/

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  17. bendedspoon11 April 2011 at 07:13

    fabulous :)

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  18. Breathing Between Apathy and Perfection11 April 2011 at 09:18

    I read your info, then a few of your poems, and I can totally see the mind of a mathematician in your beautiful, calculated poems. Thanks for sharing!

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  19. honeyhaiku11 April 2011 at 11:09

    Ok, seriously this is fabulous. I am enrapture by the play and beauty here.

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  20. fiveloaf11 April 2011 at 11:43

    great write! mines here~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/18/natures-gravity/

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  21. Jingle11 April 2011 at 12:50

    love it.

    A++

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  22. Rene/ Not The Rockefellers11 April 2011 at 14:18

    sensual poetry is something that is good for me :)

    get up, get up, get up...

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  23. lucychili14 April 2011 at 02:39

    the gaps are where
    the wonder lies =)

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  24. UmaAnandane14 April 2011 at 08:53

    Interesting Input.Liked it!

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