Monday, 18 April 2011

aeons


forget night,
can be reminder
of stillness-
also drag
an amoral rendition
of frozen impact 
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16 comments:

  1. moondustwriter18 April 2011 at 08:49

    Nicely done Shadorma
    One suggestion on the second line the syllable count is I think one over - you could take " that" out and it would still read nicely
    Hope you enjoyed getting to know the Shadorma

    Moondustwriter

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  2. Jingle18 April 2011 at 09:59

    superb!

    A++

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  3. thingy18 April 2011 at 12:57

    Amazing, Gautami.

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  4. Jannie Funster18 April 2011 at 16:10

    whooo, amazing words strung together here.

    amoral rendition -- let me stay away from doing renditions like that!

    xoxo

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  5. sage18 April 2011 at 18:25

    Frozen Impact... powerful

    I like that photo, btw.

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  6. lynnaima18 April 2011 at 18:26

    ouch, that was a bullet!!!! :)
    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/

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  7. ayala19 April 2011 at 04:15

    Nicely done!

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  8. Sean Vessey19 April 2011 at 12:26

    Thank you. I enjoyed your exploration of the form. :-)

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  9. Mia19 April 2011 at 14:16

    wow! amazing!

    Luna

    http://lunawitch15.wordpress.com/

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  10. Brian Miller27 April 2011 at 09:28

    i think in many ways we have forgotten that stillness having extended our night with artificial light...but stillness we need...

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  11. Old Ollie27 April 2011 at 09:30

    Nice tight poem.

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  12. Cathy27 April 2011 at 10:18

    Nice tight light.

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  13. Kati patrianoceu27 April 2011 at 12:29

    intriguing photo, too! :)

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  14. LauraX27 April 2011 at 18:59

    quite beautiful!

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  15. emily wierenga27 April 2011 at 19:11

    this reminder of stillness, it gave me peace. thank you.

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  16. Joybird29 April 2011 at 16:44

    fascinating

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