Tuesday, 29 March 2011

musty scents will set me free





















I look at you both-
entwined in the throes of love,
musty scents of which reaches out to me.
I envy you, your freedom-
your free spirits mingled with each other.
oblivious of my staring,
you are lost in the vast space of each other.
each of your pores incite me
but I am trapped in my smile.

"maestro made me a legend,
giving me glass eyes"

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Mona Lisa by Da Vinci does not need any introduction. Her smile has fascinated many, and few cynics think of it as fake. But everyone has some kind of reaction after looking at the painting, her smile. I think of her as a trapped soul. This is a raw work, needs to be edited. I will eventually get around that.
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23 comments:

  1. Mama Zen29 March 2011 at 09:57

    What a cool perspective!

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  2. Ramesh Sood29 March 2011 at 10:02

    What a write...Gautami..you added to the enchanting smile..

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  3. Donna B29 March 2011 at 16:12

    Very interesting slant...great job.

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  4. Andy29 March 2011 at 18:29

    Very interesting take...her smile is indeed a topic for conversation

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  5. Diana Lee29 March 2011 at 18:43

    I agree, what a fantastic perspective you present. Well done.

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  6. flaubert29 March 2011 at 19:10

    Gautami, nicely done to the prompts and I love the ending.

    Pamela

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  7. marousia29 March 2011 at 19:44

    Nicely done with a superb ending

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  8. Judy Roney30 March 2011 at 05:20

    This is a surprise poem. I am impressed that you put two difficult prompts together like this.

    http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/03/musty-minutes.html

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  9. Brian Miller30 March 2011 at 07:37

    each of your pores excite me...wow...thats intense...smiles.

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  10. lightverse30 March 2011 at 08:37

    Wow! You really did a superb job with the prompts! I love the way you look at things from different perspectives!

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  11. hpicasso30 March 2011 at 09:20

    if eyes could talk...oh wait, they just did

    Peace, hp

    http://hpicasso.blogspot.com/2010/10/just-words.html

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  12. Mike Patrick30 March 2011 at 11:12

    The power of a prompt: to use a perspective from within a painting. There is a voyeuristic horror story lurking in there somewhere. Marvelous.

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  13. vivinfrance30 March 2011 at 11:30

    You are showing us a different side of you, Gautami, and I find it moving. Thank you.

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  14. Trulyfool30 March 2011 at 12:12

    Gautami,

    The M.L. as an onlooker! Interesting take.

    Trulyfool

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  15. versebender30 March 2011 at 13:54

    Well...Mona Lisa as a voyeur. This was quite clever! Vb

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  16. Steve Isaak30 March 2011 at 14:26

    Excellent take on the subject. Distinctive.

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  17. thingy30 March 2011 at 17:27

    I love the way you turned it around. I'm am looking through her eyes.

    A terrificly perspective piece, Gautami.

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  18. Rachel Hoyt30 March 2011 at 18:15

    Ooooooooohh. I love your point of view here!

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  19. Mary30 March 2011 at 18:45

    a creative take on the We Write Poems prompt. I have never envied Mona Lisa though. To me, she always looks like she is hiding something not very pleasant.

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  20. Elaine30 March 2011 at 18:46

    Nice, just nice!

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  21. Tumblewords:30 March 2011 at 20:02

    I like the way you saw her...very nice!

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  22. Wayne Pitchko31 March 2011 at 14:53

    really like where you went here.....very nice Gautami

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  23. Luke Prater1 April 2011 at 04:23

    excellent. I always enjoy a poet who knows how to get to the essence of what they are wanting to express and convey it with clarity and word-economy. Bravo

    Kind regards

    Luke @ WordSalad

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