Sunday, 13 March 2011

unknown gap

some thing flutters
I watch wings unfold
midnight blue resonates

slide of it is a tribute
to the earthy feel
of scented surroundings

my feet fall into big gap
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23 comments:

  1. Brian Miller13 March 2011 at 07:10

    the first part makes me think og butterflies....

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  2. Jingle13 March 2011 at 10:16

    cool imagery, Happy Sunday.
    :)

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  3. Monkey Man13 March 2011 at 10:30

    Spring blooms come to mind. Great Sunday 160. Thanks for playing again this week.

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  4. keiths ramblings13 March 2011 at 16:37

    A delightful picture in words.

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  5. Kavita14 March 2011 at 00:56

    I could only think of dreams here... cuz my mind drifts into such gaps in dreams... in and out.. in and out.. :)
    Vivid and beautiful, Gautami!

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  6. Alice Audrey14 March 2011 at 06:29

    Oh, you've been to the Bad Lands too? :)

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  7. magiceye14 March 2011 at 06:30

    this is lovely!

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  8. Jinksy14 March 2011 at 06:56

    I find 'slide' a rather uncomfortable way of expressing a silk or satin smoothness... It's a bit too close the the recent images of earthquake/landslips...

    How about something like
    'its whisper is a tribute' because silk whispers, and also gives an impression od sliding?

    Hope you don't mind my suggesting a re-think? The butterfly image works well with midnight...

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  9. thingy14 March 2011 at 07:02

    That last line is intriguing and a bit scary. This is a thinker, which I like very much.

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  10. gautami tripathy14 March 2011 at 07:53

    The fluttering thing is not a butterfly....and there is nothing silken in here....at least not when I wrote it. If it got converted after I posted, then I don't know anything about that...

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  11. Deborah14 March 2011 at 08:25

    I watch wings unfold
    midnight blue resonates ... ooh just lovely!

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  12. jaerose14 March 2011 at 08:46

    All those wonderful feelings..makes it worth taking that step..Jae

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  13. Jingle14 March 2011 at 10:24

    Thanks for sharing...

    A++

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  14. abthomas14 March 2011 at 10:59

    Fantastic images cascade my mind! Great write!

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  15. mairmusic14 March 2011 at 11:24

    Your use of English is interesting, idiosyncratic.

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  16. Catherine Denton14 March 2011 at 11:50

    The fall took me by surprise; I was too busy staring at the butterfly.
    My Blog

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  17. oldegg14 March 2011 at 14:11

    The unusual word configuration of this poem allows each of us to read our own interpretation into it.

    I saw the curiosity in something beautiful leading me to danger! Intriguing post.

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  18. Andy Sewina14 March 2011 at 16:21

    Love the line 'midnight blue resonates' I'm a midnight person too!

    <3

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  19. bodhirose14 March 2011 at 20:26

    Your gap remains unknown to me but I enjoyed your poem that had people thinking of butterflies, dreams, blooms, etc...

    Thank you for sharing your link with me.

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  20. Meryl Jaffe15 March 2011 at 06:08

    Cool poem - provides some structure and guidance, but it is up to us to figure out what it is.

    Thanks!

    Meryl
    http://departingthetext.blogspot.com

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  21. Susan Helene Gottfried16 March 2011 at 09:38

    Like others, I'm seeing beauty and delicacy here, G. This is lovely, precise, and small. I just want to watch it alight on my hand, afraid to breathe lest it leave.

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  22. Steve Isaak16 March 2011 at 17:09

    Excellent.

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  23. Vinay21 March 2011 at 11:45

    calm imagery here, in your wings..! :) liked it.

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