Wednesday, 8 April 2009

the shadows form a shade around me

I kind of let go of my mind and the following came into being. Sometimes there is some sort of sense in the seemingly nonsense. I had not done this for a while now. What is it, you and I have to decipher. However for now, read on for whatever it is worth......

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lotus-posed I sit on a chair
the cool harmattan breeze that comes through every opening in the house flirts with me
I wish to know its ploy in its wake
the sun is setting in the sky and the shadows form a shade around me
I am now like melting snow, tilting towards the puddle of memory
the sun fades away giving in to darkness by the time I close my eyes
I crash to the ground with a loud bang, and a cloud of dust rises in my stead
all night I roll from one end of the floor to the other
in the dawning light I run out to nowhere
stunning exit, wouldn't you call it?
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20 comments:

  1. venus668 April 2009 at 06:15

    Beautiful as always.I always admire your work.

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  2. anthonynorth8 April 2009 at 06:43

    Stunning all round, actually.

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  3. Lorraine8 April 2009 at 07:19

    Words really do seem to just flow out of you as naturally as rain drops on a flower

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  4. ThomG8 April 2009 at 09:05

    This really flows well and I like when you let your mind wander. It shows some truly beautiful writing when you do.

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  5. Raven's Wing Poetry8 April 2009 at 10:07

    This is beautiful...and hardly nonsense. I love it. You and I seem to be digging the lotus analogies lately....

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  6. gigidiaz8 April 2009 at 10:50

    I like it. I think the free writing makes it smooth to read. The fact that not each sentence is planner and arranged to mean something makes the writing very fresh and fun to follow.
    Happy 3WW!
    I played too

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  7. Tumblewords:8 April 2009 at 11:01

    Interesting visuals - love the flow!

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  8. Deborah Godin8 April 2009 at 14:39

    I love the sense of connection, or maybe it's identification, with the environment, with weather, with being there.

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  9. J. Andrew Lockhart8 April 2009 at 15:51

    yes I would! interesting...

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  10. SweetTalkingGuy8 April 2009 at 16:11

    Yeah, I think I would!!

    I don't think I can manage the Lotus position though!!

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  11. quin browne8 April 2009 at 18:43

    i always enjoy your work

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  12. Jeeves8 April 2009 at 21:33

    This is actually so nice. Why the disclaimer. The flow is amazing

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  13. Ann (bunnygirl)8 April 2009 at 22:14

    Interesting imagery. I love the "melting snow, tilting toward the puddle of memory." Very nice.

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  14. sudharm baxi8 April 2009 at 22:36

    That flowed well, good narration..

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  15. Whitesnake8 April 2009 at 23:41

    I would call it the ultimate groove!

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  16. Witchmojo9 April 2009 at 04:04

    'in the dawning light I run out to nowhere' Absolutely loved that line. I'm beginning to look forward to reading your work more each week.

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  17. dreamscapes9 April 2009 at 05:44

    like a story it goes.. nice

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  18. maglomaniac12 April 2009 at 06:56

    Visual pull pulled me and I veered for the frissons:D

    HARSHA

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  19. Novel Nymph12 April 2009 at 07:30

    This is beautiful, every line in the poem flirts with me!

    Novel

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  20. Angel13 April 2009 at 16:06

    Different and interesting!

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