with meticulous care he squeezes the tube,
watching the shaving cream touch the bristles.
reverently he rubs it on his face,
almost with an orgasmic passion.
shaving for the first time,
he is rendering tribute to his coming of age.
The American Sandwich created by Andy Sewina
Write a piece of flash fiction in just three American Sentences. Allen Ginsberg's American Sentence has seventeen syllables. Your task is to use as few words as possible to fill the sandwich.
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in front of the mirror,
he sees himself unfolding
ALMOST A MAN NOW
flashes of his future unfolds-
mirrored within him
And go join the NaisaiKu Challenge...
I'm really liking American Sandwiches and will have to try one soon. Yours is perfect for the subject! You always create such vivid pictures with your images!
ReplyDeleteI wrote about the same subject today.
Thanks Gautami, you are a star!
ReplyDeleteThanks Gautami, you are a star!
I have yet to try an American sandwich. Loved the Naisaiku.
ReplyDeleteI have never heard of this. I am going to try it as soon as I get a breath after exams.
ReplyDeleteLove the tautness of your second poem ~ succint!
ReplyDelete'Love the tautness of your second poem ~ succint!'-
ReplyDeletethanks for sharing this ..
hmm hmm sooo good
ReplyDeleteYou are amazing lady !! such ideas !! super :)
ReplyDeleteThe Naisaiku was deep.
ReplyDeletegreat times two!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading both, the sandwich and the naisaiku. the naisaiku was thought-provoking.
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