Wednesday, 29 April 2009

raise the bar

blood in my veins rages
comparable to sounds
a turbulent ocean makes
in the wake of a storm
pulsating to an unheard beat
my skin quarrels with me
warning me of lost opportunity
INSISTING I BE IN YOUR SERVICE

I DON'T THINK I CAN BE SERVILE
opportunity lost warns me
and my quarrelling skin's
beat pulsates in a manner
unheard of. silent storms wake up
turbulence within me
which make oceans tame
compared to the sounds of
raging blood in my veins

"I move away and see your skin pulsating"
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26 comments:

  1. ThomG29 April 2009 at 06:48

    IT certainly doesn't seem forced. Very powerful stuff here.

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  2. anthonynorth29 April 2009 at 07:33

    You're getting more and more powerful.

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  3. SweetTalkingGuy29 April 2009 at 07:40

    Hi Gautami, You've definitely raised the bar here, the very thing that is making the blood in your veins rage, is also the catalyst for some amazing poetry!
    -Andy

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  4. maglomaniac29 April 2009 at 08:57

    Whoaaa man,amazing.
    Gautami actually pulsating poetry.
    Keep raising the bar.

    ~Harsha

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  5. jimmmaaa29 April 2009 at 09:37

    I like this Gautami.

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  6. Serena29 April 2009 at 10:16

    I love this poem. Its now one of my favorites.

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  7. Liz at Yips and Howls29 April 2009 at 10:32

    I like the pulsing in the poem itself and the image of skin quarreling - all very powerful

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  8. Deborah Godin29 April 2009 at 10:38

    So vivid! I always love the way your images stir things up and stay with me after I click away...

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  9. Life without Clots29 April 2009 at 11:04

    Forced? you all make it flow easy.

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  10. Amy29 April 2009 at 11:12

    Excellent. I could feel the words as I read them.

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  11. Tumblewords:29 April 2009 at 11:50

    Energetic and vivid. Nice!

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  12. floreta29 April 2009 at 12:08

    wow, very masterfully done!! great job!

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  13. Wendy29 April 2009 at 12:37

    Just heard about you losing your blog - I am SO sorry and can completely understand how devastating that must be. Hope Blogger can help retrieve it for you.

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  14. Whitesnake29 April 2009 at 12:46

    tut tut!
    I thought you were such a lovabled young woman!

    *giggles*

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  15. ellie29 April 2009 at 13:03

    Such a strength in your words.

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  16. sarah29 April 2009 at 13:04

    You are so clever :-)

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  17. Wayne Pitchko29 April 2009 at 14:13

    nicely done..."quarrelling skin's beat" i really like

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  18. Kimberly29 April 2009 at 14:51

    Very nicely done. I really enjoy poems that flow both ways.

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  19. blisshappens29 April 2009 at 15:05

    I liked the repetitiveness of turbulence and ocean. well done, enjoyed it! - meg

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  20. Jeeves29 April 2009 at 23:26

    Your poems are getting more powerful.

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  21. Witchmojo30 April 2009 at 06:47

    Wow, that was dynamite. I wouldn't have known you felt forced when writing it. Love the idea of skin quarreling, superb.

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  22. Angel30 April 2009 at 11:16

    Very powerful and inticing read.

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  23. Ann (bunnygirl)30 April 2009 at 22:35

    Nice imagery here. You're starting to change my view of poetry with all the interesting forms you use.

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  24. Lisa Drafall1 May 2009 at 00:37

    Can't wait to read more.

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  25. Lucy1 May 2009 at 12:16

    very powerful piece Gautami!

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  26. Janice Thomson1 May 2009 at 18:27

    Your work is amazing - it is a treat to read you Guatami.

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