Tuesday, 8 February 2011

ransom

your green eyes beguile me
with a hint of a smile
vast sea behind you cannot diminish your aura

that mind stretches mine to limits
that voice pushes me beyond me
yet I only see that defined chin

my cerebral nature has turned verbal
intellectual into sensual
I seriously pretend to be casual

I pick up the sensitivity
gently hold it to me
let essence of senses take over me

"the mafia that is you holds me to ransom"
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22 comments:

  1. Timoteo8 February 2011 at 18:13

    Love that last line!

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  2. Brian Miller8 February 2011 at 18:47

    this was a delicious write...and yes that last line rocked...

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  3. Caty8 February 2011 at 19:13

    As usual, I loved your write. And I agree that last line was priceless!

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  4. Beachanny8 February 2011 at 20:13

    Rings so true - not wanting to give way and yet your heart falling captive against perhaps your better judgment. Well written dear. Yes, it was a brilliant last line.

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  5. Teresa8 February 2011 at 20:16

    What a wonderful sensual poem! I love this one.

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  6. marousia9 February 2011 at 00:30

    Beautifully crafted sensual poem - thank you

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  7. budh.aaah9 February 2011 at 00:49

    Nice very very nice Gautami. you write so well.

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  8. irene9 February 2011 at 02:53

    The words reverberate..the last line sums it up.

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  9. Mary9 February 2011 at 03:34

    I love the way you worked with all three prompts to create this poem! Well crafted. I liked the third stanza: intellectual into sensual!

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  10. Judy Roney9 February 2011 at 04:27

    I like your style and what you said about this being your interpretation of the prompt. That is what poetry is about and I forget that. I really like this poem and I like the way you end with senses taking over you. Then the clincher at the end! Well done!

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  11. barbara9 February 2011 at 08:37

    That would make one heck of a valentine. Head over heels.

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  12. flaubert9 February 2011 at 08:40

    Gautami this is sensual poem. I agree with Judy, it is our interpretation of the prompts. That is what poetry is all about.

    Pamela

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  13. Elizabeth9 February 2011 at 09:04

    Beautifully sensuous. Absolutely love where you took this prompt. I had a difficult time with it and almost skipped it completely. Did however find inspiration. I love what you do Gautami,

    Elizabeth

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  14. Eric 'Bubba' Alder9 February 2011 at 11:14

    These are the words of someone in love. Great stuff, Gautami!

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  15. Shashi10 February 2011 at 01:07

    I enjoyed it so much.. Thanks for sharing...
    Last line was perfect...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html

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  16. Myrna R.10 February 2011 at 07:09

    Passionate and sensual. What a tribute to a lover.

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  17. Asobime10 February 2011 at 09:04

    A lovely love poem.....dips into the good part of exotic.

    Lady Nyo

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  18. lightverse10 February 2011 at 09:41

    I agree with so many of the other posters here - this is a lush, sensual, sensuous poem - and it is gorgeous.

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  19. Claudia10 February 2011 at 12:18

    so nice...and the last line was a powerful "wow"

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  20. Susannah11 February 2011 at 07:45

    Very nice! :-)

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  21. Kavita11 February 2011 at 11:46

    This was such an intense One Shot... beautiful! I think I can relate to this one all too well, Gautami.. :)
    And I really like those last lines (the one in quotes) of your poems... they are the perfect summary!!!

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  22. Soraya11 February 2011 at 19:32

    A mix of sensuality, beauty and images... I like it. Thanks for sharing and for visiting and left a kind comment in my poem :-)

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