Tuesday, 30 November 2010

retrieval

how does one retrieve you
from wherever you have gone 
shall I serenade ballads
or sing sopranos
maybe you like opera

none of those are my talents
poetry is what is latent
I can't write similes
but seasonings of metaphors
can garnish it well

a few words from you
I can weave into my tapestry
thinking of it as embroidery-
(if you wish I can put numbers)
so help me retrieve you

25 comments:

  1. Ooooh, Gautami. You've done it again. Beautiful sentiments.

    http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/12/01/one-shot-wednesday-monotone/

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  2. i love the weaving in this poem. It is fluid and beautiful my friend

    A one shot beauty

    Moonie smiles

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  3. You're on the right track...if all else fails, we must employ poetry.

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  4. What a wonderful poem! There is much beauty here.

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  5. very nice poem...
    deep feelings :)

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  6. I like the way your mind works, you use the language in ways I'd never imagine, yet I feel like I get your ideas hand-delivered perfectly. Liked this very much, especially the...helpful wishing in the last line.

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  7. A lovely poem, showing unusual use of words, which go well with your sentiments.

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  8. I like the way you've used the prompt.

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  9. Ahh Gautami, you are indeed a poetic lotus blossom. Once again you have written your heart into a poem, and what number would you weave into your tapestry? I enjoyed the content and flow of your poem, as always.
    एक अच्छा दिन है
    Regards
    Don

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  10. Wonderful. Just wonderful. Mind you, you alway are. Nice one shot. Love and Light, Sender

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  11. i like that you try to "speak" the language of the beloved...very, very nice..

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  12. Nice interpretation of the prompt Gautami.
    Pamela

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  13. Gautami, your talent is far from latent. It is potent with life, emotions, and meaning. I love what you do, and always come here seeking and finding a satisfied contentment. Thank you,

    Elizabeth

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  14. Pleasant, solid work - nice theme-enveloping finish.

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  15. If you find out how to retrieve someone, please tell me. This is lovely, has the appeal of something sewn or woven. Thanks, Gay @beachanny

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  16. Aww.. anyone who reads this, will automatically get spun into this harmless web of words you have laid out... So if the one you wish to retrieve is reading this, be rest assured that your task is done! :)
    A lovely poem, Gautami..
    As for your writing talents, there is nothing latent about it at all!! It's marvelous..

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  17. I agree with Kavita; your writing is marvelous.

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  18. Dear Gautami

    Its beautifully penned and the emotions are so lovely inter weaved...
    thanks

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  19. such powerful emotions you share with your words...beautiful.

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  20. Ah Gautami, you are too modest. I think you could write anything that you put your mind too. Lovely thoughts and weaving of them all together.

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  21. You can do so much with your words and you remind me how we who write are all making tapestries. A word here from you, a scene taken in there, a smell on a summer day..they all go into our weaving. Beautifully done.

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