Monday, 22 November 2010
shifting with the winds
with utmost care
he rubbed the tarnished trophy
and summoned the ghosts.
he never expected to find his own mother
in that mist of shadows-
shifting with the wind
which came out of nowhere.
he reached out,
shaking as he silently cried,
to embrace that ghost,
but he found no flesh nor blood nor bone, '
closing his eyes he swam back in time
and reached home
in his mind, he saw his mother-
thinking how she once she gathered her purse,
looked around, but did not see him.
she sobbed and cried, where are you, my son?
"son and mother, lost from each other,
unaware who is the ghost,
both silently crying into that trophy"
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beautiful and leaves such longing...love the question posed-who is ghost?
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing wistful poem. So sad that they should have lost each other.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem and so sad but true, that longing we have for the lost.
ReplyDeleteWow that is a wonderful poem that could be worked into a fantastic idea for a novel. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteOh, I like this! Such mystery. I can visualize this scene with haunting clarity. Great write!
ReplyDeleteThank You. This is very meaningful and very evokative. It recalls for me memories of loved ones lost...
ReplyDeletewho left who and who is the ghost?
ReplyDeleteNicely done.
who is the ghost? - an interesting write, and a deep sadness of loss...
ReplyDeleteOh, very clever and thought-provoking! :)
ReplyDeleteThis reminded me of a genie lamp - nicely crafted - thank you for sharing
ReplyDeleteThe best ghost stories are the ones where you aren't sure! Very well constructed.
ReplyDeleteSo many possessions can provide haunting memories!
ReplyDeleteLonging for a loved one, often is lost in our imaginations. Beautiful piece!
ReplyDeleteThis is so sad I mean beautifully written and can relate to it too..
ReplyDeleteOh...woww awesome.
ReplyDeleteThis is a deep and powerful plea to reconnect with loved ones we have lost.
ReplyDeleteLove how hauntingly light this is. I was very close to my grandparents and sometimes I have dreams so real that I carry their presence with me throughout the day...
ReplyDeleteGreat sadness and yearning, even stronger for coming from a what one would think would be a memory of pride and happiness as marked by a childhood trophy...you let the reader relive some of his own sadness in your words.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful poem Gautami.
ReplyDeletePamela
that is a sad, sad thought, being lost from your own....thanks for linking oete
ReplyDeletelost from each other...a sad place to be..loved the question at the end
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done.
ReplyDelete-- K
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Emotionally affecting, thankfully cut-to-it work.
ReplyDeletetickling question..
ReplyDeletehaunting as well...
beautiful job...
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Very cleverly written. A great emotional piece.
ReplyDeleteSo very haunting. A fine sense of yearning and loss.
ReplyDeleteVery good writing.
ReplyDeletetrilling - Very well written.
ReplyDeleteNice expression of longing for ones lost, whether truly ghosts of the past or distant in the here and now. Well done.
ReplyDelete...and reached home in his mind. Loved that. This poem leaves one with a lot of questions... which can be a good thing!
ReplyDeleteI liked is so much.. the yearning and the longing comes out so vividly in this...
ReplyDeleteॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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"He rubbed the tarnished trophy and summoned the ghosts." What a powerful line. It sings and says so much. There is a story beginning in that line. I enjoyed your poem and found it very thoughtful on your part. Great job.
ReplyDeleteAck! That longing must be unbearable!
ReplyDeleteWhat a sad poem... and the twist towards the end made it even more sad...
Beautifully written nonetheless!
The living and the dead inhabit each other. No one can over-see the boundaries between loved ones. After all, we spend our whole lives trying to erase them.
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful poem.