Monday 15 January 2007

Revelation

forlorn and gloomy
i stare at the moon,

where I see you curled

akin to an apostrophe.

suddenly

there is a swift revelation

that it is the moon

which is
lonesome,
like a parenthesis
without its mate.

25 comments:

  1. what a powerful little poem! Did you write it? Clever. Thank you.

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  2. i agree getzapped, powerful and at the same time so tender...

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  3. I read ... somewhere in your trail of comments on the blogs of others we both read ... that you're having a bit of difficulty finding your muse and goodly bits of poetry coming from your pen.

    But here I come and read no evidence of said difficulty. None. Absolutely none.

    "... that it is the moon
    which is lonesome ..."

    Fine work there luv

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  4. like a parenthesis
    without its mate.

    wow. this is very beautiful.

    you write beautifully.

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  5. Thine poems require more fatuousness, more frivolity, else - I add parenthetically - how am I to follow them?

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  6. beautiful image in the poem, and the pic goes nicely with the poem

    btw, last night I watched Water--I'll have a review up in a few days

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  7. I meant to say Earth, I watched and reviewed Water a month or so ago

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  8. oh, this is beautiful! it was fun to read it out loud. :)

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  9. This is so beautiful! I will never look at the moon the same way--what an amazing image!

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  10. love the way you've done this
    especially that apostrophe image
    cheers

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  11. Gautami. my friend read this to me over the phone yesterday while I was working and when she mentioned your name as the author, I felt an exclamation mark. Of course, Gautami is a wonderful poet and I hastened to add a mathematician too! This is terrific.

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  12. getzapped: Thanks. What do you think?

    kindness(disarms the difficult): Thanks.

    lady wordsmith: I was having a problem writing poetey. I still have it. I kind of forced myself yesterday to just sit and write. At times one has to do it.

    Thanks. My relationship with the moon is "love and hate" kind.

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  13. kj: Thanks. Sometimes words just flow, at others I have to make them flow.

    percival: I will remember that for the next quaint verse I write, in parenthesis!!

    sage: Thanks.
    I look forward to your review of EARTH.

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  14. andrew: I hadn't read it out loud. Thanks for telling me.

    firebird: It does look like alone, doesn't it?
    :D

    floots: Only you could point the apostrophe image. I am glad you did.

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  15. pat: thanks. You write so well.

    ces: Gee, thanks. I don't know what else to say here....

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  16. the moon somehow holds me in awe.

    and you have written an awesome piece about it. :)

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  17. oh, gautami, i simply love this one. perhaps because i'm partial to the moon... :)

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  18. Lovely imagery. I hope you really are not all that forlorn yourself though!

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  19. Now I have to give it to you, the last two lines nailed it.

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  20. loved the way you put it Gautami

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  21. magic eye:Thanks!

    dsnake1:moon affects us in numerous ways.

    polona:Amen!

    tlc:Arn't we all at one time or the other?

    javitz: *smile*

    amalendu: thanks!

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  22. Yes, what about the moon, without its mate!?

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  23. Being a Cancerian moon maiden, I really loved this poem, but even if I wasn't, I would still love it for your clever use of words, Gautami.

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