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| The Snake Charmer, Henri Rousseau, 1907 |
I yearn for an opal ring
with a verve
I want to strengthen my bonds
with that snake charmer
I fake a yawn
while my heart races
he rubs his fingertips on his instrument
while I pick the threads
in the mirror of snake eyes
his muse has raw edge
in the corridors of betrayal
he offers sheep to the snakes
"I find omen in that dull opal ring,
thrust that dagger deep into him"
Wow, this is a little scary, well done!
ReplyDeleteNice--I like the darkness and animals that lurk in Rousseau's paintings.
ReplyDeleteI like how the poem and Rousseau's painting compliment each other -- your poem seems almost ekphrastic in nature. And it seems to me to speak to a shame that anyone who takes a "road less traveled" -- an alternate choice, especially something not favored by society or even frown upon -- battles with just. We women aren't supposed to like snakes or their charmer -- but this is all unsaid.
ReplyDelete-Nicole
Excellent piece. The ending brilliantly devised and placed. Thanks for the read
ReplyDeletewow creepy and scary at the same time wonderfully done.
ReplyDeleteA superb use of the wordle words - It is dark, sensuous and mysterious.
ReplyDeleteA perfect combination of several prompts all woven into a masterpiece!
ReplyDeleteOh, Gautami what a beautifully, dark
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Pamela
An ominous piece that fits the painting well.
ReplyDeletePowerful feelings in your imagery!
ReplyDeleteRich and brilliantly done!
ReplyDeleteAn opal ring with a verve ... I can see it, flashing and sparkling with fire. Perfect image. Your poem is packed with splendid details.
ReplyDeleteSophisticated and thought-provoking as usual, Gautami - I always love your poems. Greetings! M.
ReplyDeletelove your words!
ReplyDeleteWow, this is really beautiful!
ReplyDeleteWoah, didn't see that ending coming. Powerful!
ReplyDeleteExquisitely constructed and dark. Just how I like them. lol --So glad you are doing the wordle each week with us.
ReplyDeleteBrenda
You're so masterful, Gautami!
ReplyDelete<3
You are very good. Your vision is both unique and powerful. I imagine you would be an absolute master if I were able to read your native tongue.
ReplyDeleteFascinating piece... find the darkness of this one rather intriguing.
ReplyDeleteYou have drawn great power from the prompts.
ReplyDeleteYour narrator is trying hard not to be a sheep. All of Rousseau's paintings seem to have a calming quality about them, has she been fooled? This is such a beautiful and deep poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind comments on my blog!
ReplyDeleteThis is a wonderful poem and I particularly liked the use of "opal" in your poem and it immediately took me to the opaline moon in the sky.
beautiful spin of words... i was lost in the web of ur imaginations....
ReplyDeleteLovely dark words.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Oh man...just beautiful words and scary image!
ReplyDeleteShepherding snakes..what an amazing..head spinning thought..Jae
ReplyDeleteWell you used the 3WW words very well in just a few lines....
ReplyDeleteLike your poem :)
Take care !!
amazing one..
ReplyDeletespooky imagery.
Great description of a character I'd be leery of.
ReplyDeleteCaptivating. I just love the line:
ReplyDelete"while I pick the threads in the mirror of snake eyes"
Rousseau's painting goes perfectly with this poem, but even the poem alone creates such atmosphere. Excellent. Thanks for visiting my blog as well!
ReplyDeleteErotic, loser.
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