the wall was built long ago he sat in front of it tried to look sad he missed sounds, shadows his muted form saw it slipping through fingers- willed it to stop
A true poet seeks, asks questions and is inspired to find answers contained deep in each soul through their creations...you touch so many with your talent and I am grateful to be able to ponder each creation !
I love this poem. I feel as if it speaks so much to my own experience. As direct as a straight line to the heart. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteWalling off from experiences. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.
ReplyDeleteGood to be here...as usual..one gets something very different and unique in poetry..
ReplyDeleteThis is so sad, Gautami.
ReplyDeleteA very profound poem.
Excellent !
ReplyDeleteA true poet seeks, asks questions and is inspired to find answers contained deep in each soul through their creations...you touch so many with your talent and I am grateful to be able to ponder each creation !
Cuts to the chase.
ReplyDeleteNice job.
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Ghostly and mysterious, the top of an iceberg story peeking through. The italics in the last line give that wish so much strength, I like the effect.
ReplyDeleteThanks for this haunting poem - sad and hopeful and yet resigned.
ReplyDeleteNamaste..........cj
What a haunting and poignant gem of poetry you shared here with us.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is so skillful.
You cast your imagery so vividly. Thank you for sharing this.
It is sad, but there is still strength within. Simple, but nice.
ReplyDeletePOignant Gautami!
ReplyDeleteBut who could break the wall that divides? Thanks for sharing this piece, it speaks so much!
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Yours,
Amity
So unusual and so thoughtful.
ReplyDeleteamazingly beautiful.
ReplyDeleteVery powerful. Wow.
ReplyDelete'his muted form'could convey the whole of it.
ReplyDeleteAn expression put in words so well.
Powerful and haunting, you've conveyed so much in so few words. I had to come back and read this again. I enjoyed it very much.
ReplyDeleteso haunting...
ReplyDeleteSo sad when someone builds a wall like this you have a great insight!
ReplyDeleteGood, intimate piece.
ReplyDeleteShort and impactful.The sentiments are carved beautifully.Great work.
ReplyDeleteAlways visiting the darkside!
ReplyDeleteI guess that brings out the best in you........