while walking the ground I found a white rounded stone I drilled a hole polished it, found a lid to match a perfect shape I altered it into an eye a beady eye that stares at me, tranquil
A watchful eye, yet beady and stares, you create - interesting. Tranquil, and keeping your burdens - so you are relieved from the weight and now tranquil yourself? The underlying reason for this creation? Or discovered after? So many fascinating possibilities, and all intriguing. Excellent. I do like it quite a bit. Thank you. Beauty is in the eye, even a created one of rock, of the beholder :-)
Great! I love the fact that the eye-box creates a tranquil place and that you fondly store burdens in it. Burdens need to be locked away, but when you do it fondly you are embracing your complete self; you are whole. Marvelous!
So gorgeous, that concept, a bit like the sculptor who sees the object within the block of marble. Loved this, Gautami. I'm having a hard time posting the pic on my blog, so in the meantime, 3WW! Amy http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/06/11/prompt-etiquette-3ww/
When your creation from stone stares back at you—an interesting thought. Like this one very much.
ReplyDeletethe last line is the stunner. interesting that the eye is represented like a stone or stone cold about it
ReplyDeleteYour quote makes me end feeling inside out - but maybe that's where I started
ReplyDeleteEdgar Allen Poe would love this
Great use of the prompt!
ReplyDeleteLove this - so simple and powerful
ReplyDeleteTOTally ooky, as it should be. Kudos.
ReplyDeleteguess it certainly gives you a different perspective..haha...nice piece.
ReplyDeleteLove the last line! This is a very intriguing poem =)
ReplyDeleteStone cold eye...hmm...interesting.
ReplyDeleteI don't know about Poe, but I'm sure Dali would like this - it's surreal.
ReplyDeleteEww but aah..stones are tranquil..and I am sure they watch us too..Jae
ReplyDeleteNicely done ... interesting imagery!
ReplyDeleteNice perspective.
ReplyDeleteVery original take on the prompt...
ReplyDeleteYour poem is so unique ... thoroughly enjoyable
ReplyDeleteI am happy to be back here.. it is a beautiful read.. enjoyed every line..thanks Gautamy..
ReplyDeleteGautami, your poem fits that unnerving pic quite well.
ReplyDeletePamela
Gautami...
ReplyDeleteCreepy and Awesome!!
Very cool! Love the image of the unblinking eye, always staring. Well done.
ReplyDeleteexcellent...I love the last line especially!
ReplyDeleteA bit of a goose-bump generator, but it is so original, I really like it.
ReplyDeleteVery nice lol
ReplyDeleteCreepy but cool.
ReplyDeleteA very interesting picture and even more interesting use of the words. Chilling!
ReplyDeleteVery creative! I can't say I would have made a beady eye-but I do like your
ReplyDeleteperspective- thanks!
You let that stone eye come alive.
ReplyDeleteWe all keep our burdens within a staring eye within us. I really like your take on this one Gautami,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Very interesting read
ReplyDeletePhew, I've got a thing about funny eyes!
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I think that eye will wait until the lock turns, the door opens....
ReplyDeleteVery unusual - but surely a valid place for 'burdens'.
ReplyDeleteI really like the idea of creating a tranquil eye in which to keep ones burdens.
ReplyDeletevery interesting!
ReplyDeleteA watchful eye, yet beady and stares, you create - interesting. Tranquil, and keeping your burdens - so you are relieved from the weight and now tranquil yourself? The underlying reason for this creation? Or discovered after? So many fascinating possibilities, and all intriguing. Excellent. I do like it quite a bit. Thank you. Beauty is in the eye, even a created one of rock, of the beholder :-)
ReplyDeleteA wonderful way to lock away troubles in the cold stare of an eye! A beautifully worked poem!
ReplyDeleteThis piece is so sharp and well done.
ReplyDeletebeatuiful :)
ReplyDeleteIf only we could keep our burdens locked in a stone. Nice piece.
ReplyDeleteNice piece indeed!
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Great! I love the fact that the eye-box creates a tranquil place and that you fondly store burdens in it. Burdens need to be locked away, but when you do it fondly you are embracing your complete self; you are whole. Marvelous!
ReplyDeleteLike Pinocchio, a real live eye! Interesting what comes to land and thought. And that last line sets it all off so differently. Nice.
ReplyDeleteSo gorgeous, that concept, a bit like the sculptor who sees the object within the block of marble. Loved this, Gautami. I'm having a hard time posting the pic on my blog, so in the meantime, 3WW! Amy
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ReplyDeleteClever, imaginative.
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