Soap skids on damp skin
I slowly watch its descent
the lather too in its wake
I see a bubble form
I wish to blow it away
the translucency of the skin beckons me
(no, it is not narcissism)
I am incensed with that very thought
"when you pour water on yourself, I almost die"
hehe...nicely played...the last line of course led my mind elsewhere...
ReplyDeleteVery sensuous. But where is your prompt?
ReplyDeleteA sensual poem. Did you create a prompt for it?
ReplyDeleteGood use of the prompts.
ReplyDeleteYes, very sensual..there is something so wonderful about being in the tub..nothing to do with vanity..it's just a lovely feeling..Jae
ReplyDeleteWhat prompt is it?
ReplyDeleteVery nicely put across...the essence of the verses seem well done..Nice!
The sensuous thought of a hot lathered shower, definitely leads one to mislead...;)
Beautifully sensual, Gautami. Was this to a prompt or did you do your own thing? Either way, this is gorgeous.
ReplyDelete-Nicole
Day dreaming in the bath tub much?
ReplyDeleteI can feel the water an soap as you describe it...not narcissism...no, gratitude for a wide awake moment...that's what this would be for me anyway.
ReplyDeleteOoooh, yes, that last line made me catch my breath! Very vivid images.
ReplyDeleteooh very sensuous poem
ReplyDeleteWoW! Bubbly sensuality...nice!
ReplyDeleteI love this clever take on the prompt. Lovely images, too!
ReplyDeletewonderful images. and so deliciously sensuous.
ReplyDeleteSensual and lovely!
ReplyDeleteYes, water can be so sensual can't it? I suppose it is a reminder that we came out of the primaeval ooze!
ReplyDeleteWell...you always create wonderful endlines..Gautami.. yet another beautiful write from you..as always....
ReplyDeletenicely done Gautami...and great ending
ReplyDeleteGreat job =)
ReplyDeleteAptly titled. Ripples.
ReplyDeleteNothing is prompted!
ReplyDeleteYou have demonstrated your ability to see beyond the obvious,obviously!
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