Wednesday, 18 May 2011

translucency

Soap skids on damp skin
I slowly watch its descent
the lather too in its wake
I see a bubble form
I wish to blow it away
the translucency of the skin beckons me
(no, it is not narcissism)
I am incensed with that very thought

"when you pour water on yourself, I almost die"

22 comments:

  1. hehe...nicely played...the last line of course led my mind elsewhere...

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  2. Very sensuous. But where is your prompt?

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  3. A sensual poem. Did you create a prompt for it?

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  4. Yes, very sensual..there is something so wonderful about being in the tub..nothing to do with vanity..it's just a lovely feeling..Jae

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  5. What prompt is it?
    Very nicely put across...the essence of the verses seem well done..Nice!
    The sensuous thought of a hot lathered shower, definitely leads one to mislead...;)

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  6. Beautifully sensual, Gautami. Was this to a prompt or did you do your own thing? Either way, this is gorgeous.

    -Nicole

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  7. Day dreaming in the bath tub much?

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  8. I can feel the water an soap as you describe it...not narcissism...no, gratitude for a wide awake moment...that's what this would be for me anyway.

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  9. Ooooh, yes, that last line made me catch my breath! Very vivid images.

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  10. WoW! Bubbly sensuality...nice!

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  11. I love this clever take on the prompt. Lovely images, too!

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  12. wonderful images. and so deliciously sensuous.

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  13. Yes, water can be so sensual can't it? I suppose it is a reminder that we came out of the primaeval ooze!

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  14. Well...you always create wonderful endlines..Gautami.. yet another beautiful write from you..as always....

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  15. nicely done Gautami...and great ending

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  16. You have demonstrated your ability to see beyond the obvious,obviously!

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