Thursday, 5 May 2011

musically yours

that elegant singer had created chemistry
he was enjoying the interlude
loud music with no substance was more his style
soothing notes were for weaklings
shadows on the walls appeared so normal
were his thoughts grotesque
pyramids over pyramids of it?
his work was all done

"when the opera started again,
he daydreamed some more"

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I edited the following heavily:
pyramid of dreams
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24 comments:

  1. G-Man5 May 2011 at 18:10

    Yeah...
    I'd be day dreaming too if I was at the Opera.
    Loved your Musical 55 Gautami.
    You Rock The Planet
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  2. G-Man5 May 2011 at 18:11

    And I'd also be playing BINGO!!

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  3. Brian Miller5 May 2011 at 19:10

    i am with Gman...actually when was in NYC went to see the Green Day musical was really nice...

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  4. Monkey Man5 May 2011 at 19:31

    Music with closed eyes. Let the mind wander. Nice.

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  5. Pheromone Girl5 May 2011 at 20:22

    Most excellent story, bound in music. I can almost hear it...

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  6. Christine5 May 2011 at 20:53

    I love opera, but I can relate with the daydreaming thing, best stories I ever did write.

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  7. vivinfrance6 May 2011 at 01:26

    I too loved your wry take on opera- going. The earlier version gave me more, but the rvision was tightly written - always to be desired. I had thought on first reading the revised version that 'he' was the singer, which puzzled me a bit.

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  8. Dick6 May 2011 at 01:39

    I love music with a passion, but opera has always passed me by. So if opera is the target, I'm very much in tune with this!

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  9. brenda w6 May 2011 at 05:05

    Lovely, Guatami. I like soothing notes are for weaklings, and can picture the singer.

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  10. Kat Mortensen6 May 2011 at 05:14

    I actually enjoy opera - to a degree. Well, I like a good aria. In truth, I'm more of an operetta fan.

    I think your honed-down version of this piece has more power, although the original had some lovely images that could possibly be reincarnated in another poem?

    Kat

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  11. Mary6 May 2011 at 05:23

    I can picture this singer too. I like opera music for a while, then daydream too!

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  12. Austin6 May 2011 at 05:44

    That was pretty good, I would like to see the Spiderman one, if it doesn't get shut down!

    Blood, Sweat and Tears is mine this week.

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  13. Jingle6 May 2011 at 06:15

    love operas,

    music is always a special entertainment in my heart. lovely 55.


    Happy Mother's Day to Moms around you. Blessings..

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  14. PBJdreamer6 May 2011 at 06:56

    Opera is hit or miss with me

    I like how your words flowed on this


    Happy 55!


    that is all

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  15. flaubert6 May 2011 at 09:58

    I like the revised version best, Gautami.

    Pamela

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  16. Eric 'Bubba' Alder6 May 2011 at 10:20

    I can tell from your words here that you have an affinity for music in many forms. Nice 55, Gautami!

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  17. Belinda6 May 2011 at 10:41

    Great 55, Gautami. I don't frequent the opera but have enjoyed a few. Music fills my life as I'm married to a musician.

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  18. Steve Isaak6 May 2011 at 12:23

    Good, engaging work.

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  19. Mama Zen6 May 2011 at 15:32

    I don't blame him!

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  20. Margaret6 May 2011 at 17:58

    ...one too many arias can be a bit trying... !

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  21. versebender6 May 2011 at 18:12

    The opera...one of the artistic forms I just don't get. Excellent write. vb

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  22. Tumblewords:6 May 2011 at 19:51

    Very nice - the form is perfect for the words...

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  23. Laurie Kolp7 May 2011 at 05:57

    Bravo... bonne bouche... encore, please!!

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  24. M. A. S.7 May 2011 at 16:45

    soothing notes were for weaklings is so fantastic!

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