in the bin of tangled up holiday,
lights switch off all by themselves.
my fingers cut into my palm
but I search for my platinum ring.
in the darkness
when a soft breath moves against me;
I push it to the plateau
of shaking rattle of my body.
I fill the leaks,
while you free me with your tenseness.
"when my solitaire falls to ground, my plateau becomes a mountain"
What a very creative and unique take on the prompt! Well done!
ReplyDeleteWonderful. Sensual. Thought provoking.
ReplyDeleteKudos!
What Teresa said.... :-)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful piece. Had to read it a couple of times to let it all sink in.
ReplyDeleteoh wow - this was full of sensual beauty - nice!
ReplyDeleteYour words are always so moving. This was such a beautiful take on the prompt, very unexpected and lovely. Kat
ReplyDeleteA lot of punch in just a few words.
ReplyDeleteEvocative.
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OH, what an imagination and the words you always weave.. very unique..Thanks..
ReplyDeleteAnd thanks also for through your page I could visit Bill's haiku-usa.. oh, my ever increasing passion for haikus.
I have to agree this was very sensual .
ReplyDeleteWow. That was great! How you managed to fit the prompt into such a layered poem is amazing.
ReplyDeleteI so enjoy your work, Gautami. You draw the reader in to the experience through your images.
ReplyDeleteThis was beautiful. Such strong feelings. Good job.
ReplyDeletethis is quite intense....
ReplyDeleteFreedom indeed.
ReplyDeleteUniquely creative and intense!!
ReplyDeleteIntensely freeing. What we do for each other! A beautiful search for and discovery of perfection in an imperfect place.
ReplyDeleteYour words were subtle, yet the sensuality behind them was very powerful. Wonderful poem!
ReplyDelete...you free me with your tenseness...
ReplyDelete:)
Creative, sensual piece... rising to the plateau. Well done
ReplyDeleteOooh the things that happen when the lights go out! Very sensual!~Ames
ReplyDeletemade me feel reflective...and a bit sad...
ReplyDeletemoving
This is deep and beautifully written.
ReplyDeletexoRobyn
A unique 'word-picture' - impressed !
ReplyDeletePlease have a good start into the new week.
daily athens
inventive writing..
ReplyDeletewell done.
interesting paradox at the end
ReplyDeleteExcellent piece!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is visual and sensual, and so very well done. You are a wonderful poet.
ReplyDeleteNamaste.........cj
Ooooh! A lusty Christmas! Woo hoo! I enjoyed your beautiful words.
ReplyDeleteI just posted my story today. Please stop by and read.
Malisa
Wow, a totally different take on the prompt...intense and strong... ;)
ReplyDeleteNicely done! A very unique and creative take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteWow. Where did this come from? I am always fascinated by the direction you take these prompts. Your writing always makes me strive harder to find creative directions in my own. Thank you for that. Thank you for linking.
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