gaps bolted to metal-
I search for nuts
dropping the key,
while you align walls.
I move that metallic eyesore,
paring dirt-
we find a hidden era,
in an unbelievable quiet.
when I lock it up again
we turn around
to see something,
maybe for the last time
"I savour that thread which ties us"
I like the idea of a relationship based on working together towards and end. Very cleverly put.
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I'm amazed at the various takes on this prompt. Well done. Excellent piece.
ReplyDeleteso mysterious-unusual take on the photo-well done!
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they're stories.
Nice poem.
gaps are bolted to metal
ReplyDeleteWhat a perfect description of this weeks photo - I really enjoyed your poem. :)
"...paring the dirt
ReplyDeletewe find a hidden era"--summed up a lot of what's being written to this prompt. Enjoyed your own way of looking at connection, continuity and change here very much.
Brilliant.... and that tittle wow!
ReplyDeleteYou are a gifted poet!
Gautami,
ReplyDeleteYou've got your handle on a key feature -- economy of words. The spareness of this piece (and, it seems others collected here) is one main strength here.
But also the haunting suggestion ending the poem. It's not 'clear'. It shouldn't be! Bravo.
(I say this as one now writing what seems to be prosy poetry but really -- and I think your comment on my blog suggested your realization of this -- isn't. What seems like 'my style' of conversational casualness really is a masked, yes, you've got it: spareness!)
One 'minimalist' to another?
Trulyfool
"We find an hidden era" what fantastic writing!
ReplyDeleteWhat a unique take on the prompt. Very interesting!
ReplyDeleteWell done...you've chosen a small section to illuminate a large part of life. Nice read!
ReplyDeletenice. the stories/memories that weave us together...i think we need to share them more and more so they are not forgotten...
ReplyDeleteExcellent poem, clever use of words.
ReplyDeleteImaginative response to the picture prompt - well done :-)
ReplyDeleteLovely!
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Evocative imagery.
ReplyDeleteThis was terrific!!
ReplyDeleteWeek after week you never fail to amaze.
Loved your 55 My Friend.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
clever and wonderful..
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... a hidden era. Maybe that is one reason I love antiques. New furniture doesn't have secrets.
ReplyDeleteI love the nuts bolts of building as well as keys for locking or unlocking. Combined with the title of hidden stories wow. I love it.
ReplyDeleteLovely interpretation of the theme.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! Can be applied to so many instances in life!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written, an excellent sound-off on the theme.
ReplyDeletewow - this is literally working on an relationship - excellent write
ReplyDeleteso wistful
ReplyDeleteso beautiful, there are so many layers
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