Saturday, 11 December 2010

melted

broken breath, I left it
shivering on the stairs
icicles as its innards
burnt by frost
now see fire
engulfing dirt
my aorta can take it
while I bleed happiness

12 comments:

  1. Beautiful.. bleeding happiness and what flows is the joy of reading..here. on your page..

    well do visit to see new instant haikus both inspired ..one by Bill's page and another Rebecca's..

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  2. Bleeding happiness I like that

    Thanks and have a great start to your week

    wish I could join you for the train more often just crazy busy

    best :)

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  3. This was fantastic...
    Loved your 160

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  4. A magnificent use of the 160 characters. Beautiful piece. Thanks for playing along with the Sunday 160.

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  5. Good poem, and how nice
    that you could submit it
    to both Applehouse and
    G-Man. I like your style
    and flow.

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  6. nice. bleeding happiness in spite of the cold and icicles...

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  7. Hmm, still trying to figure it out. Interesting images.

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  8. I am becoming a huge fan of your free verses, Gautami...
    And this poem really doubled the reason for my doing so... it's a beautiful 160!!
    May those icicles never affect the gush of bleeding happiness..

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  9. A lot of imagery to behold here. Lovely, prose!

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  10. Cold, cold, cold, like the end of true love. Beautifully put together.

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  11. Thanks for the support...

    your work is always well done.

    A++

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