when I was on the threshold of youth
that oak tree
where a three legged dog slept at night
on the edge of the lake
holding hands with a boy
I kissed in the dark nights
the dog is gone
boy is gone
I go there to find palpable emptiness
see you standing in the shadows
your arms reaching out for me
"you bring newness to this place of forgotten era"
Of your poems - the ones I've read that is - I like this one best. The ways in which our pasts live on - in us, and the places we inhabit (or that inhabit us) -so beautifully told. The oak tree and the three legged dog: the details that make good literature.
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ReplyDeleteThese words are full of fulness, everywhere, so no emptinessee possible
Love your poems Gautami!
D.
Heartfelt dreams and wishes..and lovely details!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful nostalgia - I really enjoyed reading this poem
ReplyDeleteStong piece - really enjoyed it. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteGautami this is impressive as always. You said so much in so few lines.
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ReplyDeleteYou again prove your poetic chops!
The 'you' found at the end -- a mystery, not just a stock 'love' ending!
Trulyfool
Lovely sound to this poem...really enjoyed it ...gone, but not really ever gone...bkm
ReplyDeleteyes beautiful and poignant interweaving of time in this poem
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing with One Shot
MDW
A poets poem,,,, the kind of poetry that sings to a poets heart full of meaning and poetic creativity.
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Lovely poem Gautami.
ReplyDeleteThis amalgam of nostalgia with a tinge of sadness, is yet a happy poem, gentle and beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThe wistful tone adds to the sense of nostalgia.
ReplyDeleteSweet and tender words. I can't imagine why the boy ever left.
ReplyDeleteNice One Shot, Gautami!
nice...the past passes, though not always easy to find a newness waiting to be seen...
ReplyDeleteI like the imagery in this, especially the connect between the memory of the first few lines and the shadow of the last few.
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Nice. The three-legged dog was a nice touch.
ReplyDeleteHow wonderful it would be to go back again, and find what one thought was lost.
Beautiful words of meaningful places. :o)
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bringing newness into forgotten places...this is beautiful
ReplyDeletea touching write... absolutely beautiful
ReplyDeleteTouchy..beautiful..damn,it is just so true..nothing last forever,but emptiness that is refilled with our choices.i definitely am enjoying reading you more with every post.thank you so much for sharing..:)
ReplyDeleteyour sentiment is despondent yet hopeful as well. I am amazed when someone's writing makes me feel two opposite feelings like yours did here. In my humble opinion, this is a sign of a great poem!
ReplyDeletenice turn between the palpable emptiness and the reaching (empty) arms.
ReplyDeleteThe longing and loneliness is, indeed, tangible here. Creates a mood of wistfulness bordering on sadness very nicely. Fine piece of writing.
ReplyDeleteThis weaves well the spell of youthful places. Good piece.
ReplyDeleteOh, the memories you've stirred. How nicely done.
ReplyDeleteAs part of its unpredictable nature, Love seems to have this beautiful way of filling up empty spaces...
ReplyDeleteI like the way the built and tension was created here...only to end so beautifully..
I love your attention to detail. You really have given a glimmer of hope to an otherwise sad poem.
ReplyDeleteFond memories fill time lost, with hope of loving again, filling the emptiness today.
ReplyDeleteWhat a soft look back through time. Seeking emptiness only to find love. sweet flow on this one Gautami
ReplyDeleteGautami --- This truly is a VERY touching poem!! I like this very much.
ReplyDeleteVery familiar. We all need our special place. Very comfortable.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, bittersweet poem of love and loss. The beauty of the scene presents itself through the details you add. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely beautiful Gautami.
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Very nice write! I loved it!
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