Tuesday, 14 December 2010

places

place I used to be
when I was on the threshold of youth
that oak tree
where a three legged dog slept at night
on the edge of the lake
holding hands with a boy
I kissed in the dark nights
the dog is gone
boy is gone
I go there to find palpable emptiness
see you standing in the shadows
your arms reaching out for me

"you bring newness to this place of forgotten era"

36 comments:

  1. Of your poems - the ones I've read that is - I like this one best. The ways in which our pasts live on - in us, and the places we inhabit (or that inhabit us) -so beautifully told. The oak tree and the three legged dog: the details that make good literature.

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  2. WOW
    These words are full of fulness, everywhere, so no emptinessee possible
    Love your poems Gautami!
    D.

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  3. Heartfelt dreams and wishes..and lovely details!

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  4. Beautiful nostalgia - I really enjoyed reading this poem

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  5. Stong piece - really enjoyed it. Thanks.

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  6. Gautami this is impressive as always. You said so much in so few lines.

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  7. gautami,

    You again prove your poetic chops!

    The 'you' found at the end -- a mystery, not just a stock 'love' ending!

    Trulyfool

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  8. Lovely sound to this poem...really enjoyed it ...gone, but not really ever gone...bkm

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  9. yes beautiful and poignant interweaving of time in this poem

    Thanks for sharing with One Shot

    MDW

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  10. A poets poem,,,, the kind of poetry that sings to a poets heart full of meaning and poetic creativity.

    joanny

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  11. This amalgam of nostalgia with a tinge of sadness, is yet a happy poem, gentle and beautiful.

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  12. The wistful tone adds to the sense of nostalgia.

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  13. Sweet and tender words. I can't imagine why the boy ever left.

    Nice One Shot, Gautami!

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  14. nice...the past passes, though not always easy to find a newness waiting to be seen...

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  15. I like the imagery in this, especially the connect between the memory of the first few lines and the shadow of the last few.

    -Nicole

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  16. Nice. The three-legged dog was a nice touch.

    How wonderful it would be to go back again, and find what one thought was lost.

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  17. bringing newness into forgotten places...this is beautiful

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  18. a touching write... absolutely beautiful

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  19. Touchy..beautiful..damn,it is just so true..nothing last forever,but emptiness that is refilled with our choices.i definitely am enjoying reading you more with every post.thank you so much for sharing..:)

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  20. your sentiment is despondent yet hopeful as well. I am amazed when someone's writing makes me feel two opposite feelings like yours did here. In my humble opinion, this is a sign of a great poem!

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  21. nice turn between the palpable emptiness and the reaching (empty) arms.

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  22. The longing and loneliness is, indeed, tangible here. Creates a mood of wistfulness bordering on sadness very nicely. Fine piece of writing.

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  23. This weaves well the spell of youthful places. Good piece.

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  24. Oh, the memories you've stirred. How nicely done.

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  25. As part of its unpredictable nature, Love seems to have this beautiful way of filling up empty spaces...
    I like the way the built and tension was created here...only to end so beautifully..

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  26. I love your attention to detail. You really have given a glimmer of hope to an otherwise sad poem.

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  27. Fond memories fill time lost, with hope of loving again, filling the emptiness today.

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  28. What a soft look back through time. Seeking emptiness only to find love. sweet flow on this one Gautami

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  29. Gautami --- This truly is a VERY touching poem!! I like this very much.

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  30. Very familiar. We all need our special place. Very comfortable.

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  31. Beautiful, bittersweet poem of love and loss. The beauty of the scene presents itself through the details you add. Bravo!

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  32. Absolutely beautiful Gautami.
    Pamela

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  33. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/12/15/thursday-poets-rally-week-35-december-16-22/

    I wonder if you are interested in poets rally,
    Link in a random poem, visit and comment…
    Poets return favors and follow the rules, thus, hope that you won’t miss your opportunity to make new poetry friends…

    Happy Friday!
    Stay Blessed!
    xoxox

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  34. Very nice write! I loved it!

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