Woo! What an extended metaphor linking fire and anger! But "hard ground", insensitive and impenetrable, is like the final, powerful "crunch line". Dynamic!
really thought provoking, gautami. If the fire is allowed to burn out rather than doused prematurely, then the ground might be cracked and fallow and ready for seed and new growth.
Hi GT, this is another one (I counted 32 posts) using the 'hated fire.' If your friend did indeed burn in the car crash then I don't blame you at all. One can never forget a death like that, of burning to death. Way back when I was young a friend of mine died in a gasoline station fire. He worked there. A customer lit a cigarette and the whole station went up in flames. I don't know if the customer survived or not. All I remember is that I lost a very good friend all for the ignorance of one. I will never forget or forgive. ..
I love the acetylene fire of these words! But your summary in the last lines is really beautiful. It resolves the anger and highlights its pointlessness.
An angry poem today. It's good.
ReplyDeleteWow. This touched me.
ReplyDeleteRain can make a nice denouement, washing everything away.
ReplyDeleteExcellent poem!
Woo! What an extended metaphor linking fire and anger! But "hard ground", insensitive and impenetrable, is like the final, powerful "crunch line". Dynamic!
ReplyDeletereally thought provoking, gautami. If the fire is allowed to burn out rather than doused prematurely, then the ground might be cracked and fallow and ready for seed and new growth.
ReplyDeleteWow, are you writing for Zeus--or one of the lightning gods?
ReplyDeletesounds like a angry sky or a person lashing out, just like weather, we release our emotions and sometimes clears out what makes us unhappy
ReplyDeleteMy goodness,you sound cross!Brilliant poem.
ReplyDeleteIndeed! Such fires do bake the earth.
ReplyDeleteHi GT, this is another one (I counted 32 posts) using the 'hated fire.' If your friend did indeed burn in the car crash then I don't blame you at all.
ReplyDeleteOne can never forget a death like that, of burning to death. Way back when I was young a friend of mine died in a gasoline station fire.
He worked there. A customer lit a cigarette and the whole station went up in flames.
I don't know if the customer survived or not. All I remember is that I lost a very good friend all for the ignorance of one.
I will never forget or forgive.
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Excellent way to express your anger. Hope the rains doused and refreshed your mind. If not, time can proceed to heal.
ReplyDeleteWow!
ReplyDeleteWho rattled your cage?
such strong words, "my anger pours forth venom" a great way to begin and an amazing ending.
ReplyDeleteI love the acetylene fire of these words! But your summary in the last lines is really beautiful. It resolves the anger and highlights its pointlessness.
ReplyDeleteStrong write - nothing but hard ground is a fine ending -
ReplyDeleteLove that brilliant ending Guatami.
ReplyDeleteLots of ways to read this. Excellent.
Fire can be cleansing. Water extinguishes. Two very powerful elements at play.
ReplyDeleteNothing but hard ground. What happened to the anger?
You write harshness, you write cold and dark, so beautifully...
ReplyDeleteI can relate. Good job.
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..intense & thought provoking ..many thanks ..
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