Friday, 22 February 2008

chequered shadows

raging storm stopped
leaving behind remained quietness
slowly lassitude settled in,
bringing with it peace,
seeping out of each pore,
satiated to the brink.

each single breath evened out
eyes fell heavy
lashes casting chequered shadows
on silken smooth cheeks
dewy lips settled
palms open towards the sky

his fingers entwined with hers
his head fell on her disarrayed hair
in aftermath of passion
he pulled her closer
nuzzling her ears
saying sweet nothings.

"next moment he was snoring away to glory"
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36 comments:

  1. Steve22 February 2008 at 02:30

    a wonderful piece

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  2. fearfullymade22 February 2008 at 03:53

    passionate!

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  3. Rose Dewy Knickers22 February 2008 at 05:33

    As long as you were satisfied, let him snore. :)

    Rose

    xo

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  4. reader22 February 2008 at 07:06

    I love it. I love the reality of passion here . . . wonderful, beautiful, capped off with snoring.
    http://maciesreads.blogspot.com

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  5. Liza's Eyeview22 February 2008 at 07:55

    Love it! Beautifully written poem, including the part about snoring ;)

    I scribbled a poem too for this Week's Sunday Scribbling :)

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  6. Susan Helene Gottfried22 February 2008 at 08:35

    Okay, I'm in the middle of a snow/ice/rain storm so the first line made me conjure up the weather out my window (which you have to lean around books to see out of, at least from where I sit).

    When the truth of the scenario was revealed, imagine my surprise!

    btw, I agree with Rose: let him snore so long as you're happy.

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  7. Marcia (MeeAugraphie)22 February 2008 at 09:18

    I love the second verse, especially, Gautami, such a contrast to the snoring.

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  8. nonizamboni22 February 2008 at 09:31

    A sweet, funny poem--You really got me!

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  9. Sherry22 February 2008 at 12:26

    Loved this Gautami!! I wasn't expecting that ending -- you described the passion so beautifully..and you described the reality beautifully as well!!

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  10. Jo Anne O.22 February 2008 at 14:01

    This is very good...I had to go back and re read it from the beginning and then it all fell into place! Just lovely!

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  11. Granny Smith22 February 2008 at 15:13

    This is beautiful poem with a neatly funny twist at the end. I enjoyed it immensely.

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  12. Awareness22 February 2008 at 16:16

    deep slumber after deep passion? I enjoyed your poem Gautami. :)

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  13. UL22 February 2008 at 19:12

    i love the way you described passion...esp. that bit of his face buried in her hair..so very beautiful...

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  14. rebecca22 February 2008 at 22:05

    perfectly written poem....passion ignited and doused....expected ending on his part...snore away! LOL.

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  15. Betty C.23 February 2008 at 02:28

    I love the closer to this poem! Just when I thought it was the height of romantic passion...

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  16. Inconsequential23 February 2008 at 03:32

    Excellent! at least he didn't leave the money on the table and go home to his wife...


    Great write again :)

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  17. Redness23 February 2008 at 05:39

    Very clever, enjoyed this very much;)

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  18. anthonynorth23 February 2008 at 06:16

    Excellent piece - sound effects and all!

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  19. Just Jen23 February 2008 at 06:50

    why do men fall asleep after 'passion'? lol
    great take on passion!

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  20. paisley23 February 2008 at 07:39

    kind of brings one back to the boring reality of it all doesn't it......

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  21. Devil Mood23 February 2008 at 10:38

    hehe the ending is brilliant! But I really liked the sensual dimension of it, the shadows of the eyelashes, very nice :)))

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  22. CHEFDRUCK23 February 2008 at 10:52

    Snoring away to glory. Great ending. Perfect contrast.

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  23. Cricket's Hearth23 February 2008 at 19:28

    Very good indeed - and I agree with Rose.

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  24. forgetfulone23 February 2008 at 22:38

    Excellent use of the prompt! Enjoyed your wonderful poem.

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  25. sage24 February 2008 at 03:24

    Nicely done--a gentle slam on the male gender for falling asleep afterwards :)

    Maybe if my sinuses clear up, I'll write on this topic today.

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  26. January24 February 2008 at 04:32

    Great ending! Definitely full of passion.

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  27. Heather Kathleen24 February 2008 at 05:32

    and that's the way it is. great post yet again!

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  28. Lisa24 February 2008 at 06:37

    Wonderful poem that caught the "truth" of the ending perfectly.

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  29. Goodnight, Mom24 February 2008 at 07:39

    Yes, I had this very romantic sweeping scenario on my head strongly contrasted with that shot of reality.

    Great poem.

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  30. Linda Jacobs24 February 2008 at 07:41

    The sad thing is, I wasn't even sruprised by the ending! What's that say about my love life?

    Really, really well-written!

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  31. Thinking aloud24 February 2008 at 21:37

    ahh a poem with a twist..or was it a twist..;)

    really loved the lines *lashes casting chequered shadows
    on silken smooth cheeks*

    in facet evrything about it...
    :)

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  32. tumblewords25 February 2008 at 13:24

    Oh, wow! this one was so much fun! Passion-ed even!

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  33. lissa26 February 2008 at 10:38

    just like a man to sleep afterward.

    nicely written.

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  34. Amarettogirl28 February 2008 at 07:05

    This was so beautifully written - palms upward- dewy lips, I felt the rain - you captured the 'wetness' and then what a fun ending...I agree I hope she got what she needed before that started!

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  35. LittleWing28 February 2008 at 16:39

    beautiful...the quiet storm... what no cigarette shared... wonderful that he spoke to her... this was no wham bam thank you mam..

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  36. polona1 March 2008 at 09:30

    oh, that was perfect!

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