Sunday, 17 February 2008

an ode for convoluted crevices


deep crevices
absorb sound, churning it for the brain
convoluted shells weigh reverberating words
lobes soft
bitingly so
pierced, decorated with love.
you deserve stars
I settle for second best-
I let you sparkle with diamonds
 set in matt finished platinum.
my closest confidants
of my lover's naughty whispers,
I write this ode for you,
my much treasured ears.

Come ride the Poetry Train...
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31 comments:

  1. Keshi17 February 2008 at 20:08

    wow very nice Gautami!

    keshi.

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  2. floots18 February 2008 at 01:32

    nice one
    i like this
    cheers for ears :)

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  3. Rhian18 February 2008 at 03:21

    Clapping! This is wonderfully fun Gautami! Thanks for starting my day off with a grin!

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  4. Whitesnake18 February 2008 at 03:42

    you are NEVER second best

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  5. Brian18 February 2008 at 04:47

    Sensual and witty. :)

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  6. M as in Mint18 February 2008 at 04:56

    Wow!! I am all ears (& eyes) for more! The title again....ah!! :)And i see someone has seen sensuality too..Ahem! Ahem! (matte platinum finish 'over' the soft lobes, perhaps? what say? LOL! );) :)

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  7. Rose Dewy Knickers18 February 2008 at 05:09

    (((((Gautami))))

    Thanks. :) I'd like someday to be able to meet you and we can talk our ears off. ;)

    I'll be flitting around this week.

    Rose

    xo

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  8. totomai18 February 2008 at 05:31

    cheers for the ears indeed. loved the use of reverberating in this ode. thanks for the read :-)

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  9. julia18 February 2008 at 05:46

    'my closest confidants
    of my lover's naughty whispers'

    LOVE that!

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  10. Dave18 February 2008 at 06:32

    The ending is very simple and effective here. I like that "treasured" is both figurative and literal.

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  11. Anu18 February 2008 at 07:30

    very interesting thought Gautami! love your poems

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  12. anthonynorth18 February 2008 at 07:35

    'ear, 'ear - as they say.
    Excellent.

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  13. R.G. ALEXANDER18 February 2008 at 07:36

    I love this!

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  14. Christine18 February 2008 at 08:16

    gautami, this is really wonderful. You make the ear even more beautiful than ever.

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  15. Ann18 February 2008 at 08:43

    That was fun! :)

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  16. Jill18 February 2008 at 14:10

    It is weird, that they don't wrinkle as much as the rest of the face... And they are responsable for so much good things!!

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  17. paisley18 February 2008 at 16:19

    guatami,, this was so lovely... you know i never even thought about how much i do appreciate my sense of hearing... what a wonderful reminder.....

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  18. Linda Jacobs18 February 2008 at 17:18

    This reminded me of the ghost in Hamlet saying, "and poured the distillment in the porches of mine ears." Your poem truly honors ears!

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  19. Nick Mathews19 February 2008 at 03:35

    enjoyed the ending...thhnx 4 bringin a simle on the face...
    nice topic u chose.. :)
    liked it

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  20. Lisa Andel19 February 2008 at 04:45

    Oh, how very interesting.
    Then it would be. :)

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  21. Homo Escapeons19 February 2008 at 07:22

    Thanks for the nibble.

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  22. polona19 February 2008 at 10:11

    clever and well written!

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  23. lissa19 February 2008 at 11:56

    ears never sound so alluring!

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  24. missalister19 February 2008 at 12:38

    Your way of expression is extraordinary. Yet I've bookmarked you in the ordinary way... :-)

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  25. SweetTalkingGuy19 February 2008 at 13:24

    Very cleverly done! A reference on every line... I hear you!

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  26. chicklegirl19 February 2008 at 15:04

    I loved that it was so playful and yet also gave me goosebumps!

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  27. ...deb19 February 2008 at 19:45

    Oh so good all the way around. Of course you "did it right"! You "did it" wonderfully.

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  28. fox20 February 2008 at 21:35

    I adore the line "you deserve stars."

    This is a delightfully playful and sensual poem.

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  29. sister AE22 February 2008 at 16:19

    How beautiful! I guess I like my ears too, but I hadn't thought of them when I was trying to find a body part to write about.

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  30. Birdsword22 February 2008 at 19:03

    I like this poem -especially how nicely it flowed. I liked how I could "taste" the lobe while reading.

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  31. Allyson23 February 2008 at 10:00

    You definitely did it right! Fantastic!

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