Tuesday 7 April 2009

Ghostly past

sepia-tinted photo
of me swaying in a swing-
AM I A GHOST?
swing sways creakingly
colour replaces sepia

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11 comments:

  1. Wow, I really LOVE this one! I have to say it's one of my favorites by you (or anybody). The naisaiku format is particularly good for the subject, don't you think? I really like how you weave the element of time back and forth over the central ghost image. Wonderful!

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  2. Lovely words Gautami, this really takes me there - love the way you question, Am I a Ghost?

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  3. Ah..Lovely. Loved the tweak; It really doth provide the thump to the write..:)

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  4. how have you been doing? long time no see..
    hope you are well...

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  5. nicely done--the poem worked well in this pattern

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  6. "AM I A GHOST?"~
    -without access to to material facts even the sanctified courts of law would not find it easy to answer that question-(gutsy introspection nonetheless)
    as for me,i am happy to read ur writings without being 'judgemental'_
    but then one does always revere ' The Holy Ghost '..thanks for sharing this..

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  7. wonderful !! one of the best i have read on your blog !! (coz i dnt understand many ;) )

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  8. woah i liked this a lot!
    Was picturing myself.....

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