Friday 3 April 2009

chaotic

heart lodged in my throat
I try to spit it out-
it refuses to go either way

dried-up thoughts
crackle loudly within my head-
fully charging it up

lost my grip
on the things I handled
too well-
will summer breeze
bring it all back?

19 comments:

  1. you won't have to wait long to see...

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  2. loosing grips - ah all the time! It'll be summer soon!

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  3. Interesting way of putting it!

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  4. Gautami, I like this. I can feel the "dried-up thoughts crackle loudly within my head."

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  5. Oh! Love those first lines - what an emotion it gives.

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  6. nice words as usual and I agree...great first lines

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  7. I especially love that first stanza! Startling imagery.

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  8. "will summer breeze
    bring it all back?"
    I think so.
    That's what I'm waiting for. :)

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  9. Hope summer breeze will lighten things as it sweep by.

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  10. Our chaotic thoughts, how well you put it, love this ma petite :)

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  11. I like the sound of "crackle loudly within my head". I'm joining napowrimo, am a bit nervous!

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  12. "heart lodged in my throat
    I try to spit it out-
    it refuses to go either way"

    nicely said..

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  13. This is good. Wish I could write like you.

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  14. I like the edginess quietly lurking within the simplicity :-)

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