Saturday 24 May 2008

reflected changes-----One Single Impression



deeply staring into your eyes,
I see the irises changing shades
catching my mood into them
your air of detachment
disappears subtly
replaced by fierce heat

with intense interest I watch
our souls merging
where I am not I anymore
you are not you either

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Another of my rare love poetry. I am leaving this open-ended as love in itself is open-ended. Your comments and feedbacks are always welcome.

29 comments:

  1. well, i can almost feel the intensity and the exchanging energies... well done by all means!

    ok, i'll post a link to my haiga on one single impression.
    thank you for pointing me there :)

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  2. There is a sense of melting! Quite a beautiful feeling when you love.

    Gemma

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  3. I think you should write more love poems! this is wonderful! :)

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  4. The chemistry of hearts and souls, where two combine to create a new one; love is so much more than physical. I can feel the fusion, the tension and the excitement! Well done!

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  5. You are very connected to this person. I like the ending, it has a yin-yang feel to it. Excellent work!

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  6. A transformation of identities shared by a common reflection... lovely!

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  7. To be transformed by the company of another is a wonderful magic. You captured it so well. Thanks for this!
    Writing in Faith: Poems

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  8. I love these lines:
    "where I am not I anymore
    you are not you either"

    Beautiful poem. Very intense. Excellent choice of words. Thanks for sharing this. :)

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  9. beautiful lines.. just loved these ones "where I am not I anymore
    you are not you either" ... just like they have become strangers and nobody knows if they ever find a way back to each other. Kind of really sad..

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  10. Beautiful poem. The passion vibrates in the words. As many others have pointed out, the last two lines are exquisite. Wonderful.

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  11. I see the irises changing shades

    Love that line and its imagery.

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  12. You wove the changing point-of-view seamlessly into this poem. Beautiful

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  13. a perfect expression of the two becoming one.

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  14. I especially love how you capture the essence of love being a personal journey as well as a dual one - the air of detachment being replaced by fierce heat - thanks for sharing this

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  15. The beauty in your thought process here is intense. Such as when two soul mates become one. This union is indeed rare. Spectacular!

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  16. This was lovely Gautami. Beautiful and evocative work. Thanks for sharing. Great prompt suggestion too. G

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  17. "I see the irises changing shades
    catching my mood into them"

    Lovely image.

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  18. I love this as much as the original posted on One Single Impression.

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  19. Beautiful poem...so lovely when two souls meld into one...eyes meet, hearts collide...love goes beyond the physical...
    :)

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  20. Another poem expressing deep feelings-so nice.

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  21. i really liked it G... especially noting the open end of it all...

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  22. so passionate. it carries me to my own dreams

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  23. Merging and melting together. Such ageless passion.

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  24. This is timeless and passionate. Much appreciated here! Thank you.

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  25. ..those who love surely would know about it..thanks for sharing..

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  26. It is just gorgeously written. What strong love you reveal.

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