Wednesday, 21 May 2008

some crap inside my mind......Totally Optional Prompts

intense is how/what you read about me-
one aspect, I never ever intended
to get across for you to see.
now intensely I try to read, what else, me.
truly what do I really tell thee-
aspirations, dreams that are distended?
intensity of which is lost from me
all aspects gone forever, which I never intended.


I think I took too much poetic liberty with the lines, while writing a triolet. It might feel disjointed to some. However, it answers what has been playing in my mind since yesterday. Why? That is another question...


  1. Everything evolves. What you do and what you intended are not always the same, but the final outcome is often an advanced form of the intent.

  2. The meaning is often in the question, and not the answer.

  3. too much happening too quickly..

    who knows?
    who cares?
    I do!

  4. Moving away from past
    find it sticky
    like molasses
    Moving to the future
    find it clotted
    like chutney
    If only all
    my life
    was edible

  5. Don't we all scribble disjointed thoughts on the walls of our brain? I don't think you could ever loose your intensity, it must just be changing direction. Thanks for visiting even when I wasn't there!!

  6. Intent: profound and intense.

  7. very nice!
    i hope you are well!

  8. Wonderful form. I love the looking glass feel of this poem. Peace, JP/deb

  9. I have been seeing quite a bit of the Troilet lately. might have to try it

  10. Very nice :)
    I especially liked the last line.

  11. I LOVE your title - fits perfectly.

    I don't know if you care or not (if you don't then ignore this part of my comment), but you're right about taking too much license. I'm only letting you know because I was astonished when I found out how specific the form is and was glad to find out.
    This was an excellent resource for me:

    That little tidbit aside, I love your poem - intention is key. ;)

  12. i think this was intense enough!

  13. Hmmm...I kind of read this as you are showing more of yourself through your writing than you ever thought you would. I think that is a good thing! It gives your poetry more depth. I really like what you did with this form!

  14. Gone No.........Forgotten?