Saturday 20 September 2008

baser instincts



Photo by idigit teddy
artwork Natural Sculpture
from
Flickr
originally uploaded here






Attempting Erotica...*grin*


autumn nights

desiring of heating up
another body

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bathed in cool heat
breathless, hair a mess
autumn feels like sex

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writhing bodies
tangled sheets
storm unleashed

46 comments:

  1. Hi Gautami, sounds like you fulfilled your objective from my viewpoint. Of course I'm not a critic or even a poet for that matter.
    You've heard the old saying, "you can't make a silk purse from a sow's ear." That fits me in the poetry world but I have fun when I can find some mud to root in. I liked today's muddy autumn a whole lot.
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  2. You work up to your topic - the third one is the best of the three. Allusion is better than description.

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  3. You have instilled a lot of energy in Autumn!
    Thank you for sharing this.

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  4. Unusual, but Autumn is a major part of Earth's fertility so this is fully appropriate.

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  5. Wow! A good one. Write more.:)

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  6. I do favor the third one. It hints better at the topic and it's rhythmically more balanced.

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  7. Love that third stanza! It is like an imaginary, erotic painting!

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  8. An excellent job here. I particularly like the second one.

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  9. You raised the intensity in each successive stanza. Being that Autumn is my favorite season, my favorite is the second.

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  10. nice one...I mean three...precise...

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  11. You're right, Gautami. That picture fits very well with your poems. And, I love the way you introduced autumn through erotic poetry. The second/ third stanzas are my favorite. Nice job. Have a nice day.

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  12. These give a whole other (robust) context to autumn!! Would love to know more about the original of the photo, too. Nice work!

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  13. I like the last one best, too.
    Is that tree for real or photoshopped??

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  14. Amazing photo. I think the third poem is my favorite.

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  15. WOW! The photo is amazing and the poetry too!

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  16. Incredible, Gautami! Great verse, great composition, great words, "unleashing a storm."

    And where'd you find that pic to illustrate it?

    Excellent stuff. You da girl!

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  17. Oow... Tami, I think your poem is still steaming. Love it. Gosh how far we have come.
    Excellent my friend. The photo is great!

    love,Melanie

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  18. a couple of gr8 lines to match an awesome snap..cheers!

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  19. Oh, indeed! I love the chaos of autumn. And the passion.

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  20. Your third poem is very successful. I could feel the electrical charge in the atmosphere.

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  21. autumn heat ...oh yeah...clean
    and sexy.

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  22. I don't believe I'm going to say this, but erotic haiku must be the literary equivalent of a quickie

    I always enjoy your poetry--I wish I had gotten a better shot of a tree yesterday, that had split and grown back together

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  23. autumn nights
    desiring of heating up
    another body

    That's good. Winter nights too, desire the same :)

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  24. Now this one didn't do it for me, not that it matters, you have done better,,,,,

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  25. First of all, the photo is freaky-awesome. How I'd love to come across a tree like that in my travels.

    And these are my favorite lines:

    'bathed in cool heat
    breathless, hair a mess'

    Perfect.

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  26. ha! what a little cool-night snuggling leads to!! swirls of leaves falling in a storm's wind really does evoke passion

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  27. I read each as a separate piece. Enjoyed this.

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  28. whew! Did someone turn the heat on in here?

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  29. Wow, I'm so glad it's the first day of fall. You never know what will happen this evening. ;)

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  30. It sure doesn't fall flat! :) Nice work!

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  31. profound! wow!!

    I love the pic too. Amazing!


    Keshi.

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  32. Yes, very erotic words. Great job.

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  33. A very lovely take on the prompt. Very well sensualized.

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  34. That picture had me 'stumped' and quite honestly, I am totally committed to number 3, 'storm unleashed'.

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  35. M'lady it saddens me to see one of our own delving into the noxious world of the utterly commonplace whilst exploring the baser instincts of the lower classes.

    My Word.

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  36. i didn't know autumn can be hot ;)
    the third one works best for me, too

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  37. I liked the mussed up hair...

    so wonderfully wicked in taking the mundane and making it spark!

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  38. hot lines. :) and an image of what appears to be quite a hot tree. :O

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  39. Very erotic and seductive and I can see your grin :)

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  40. The baser instincts -- all three were relishing..

    and the image ..Natural Sculpture indeed for the theme...
    brilliant words, artwork choice!

    Gauthami...you made me grin, really!
    see you more...

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