Saturday, 6 September 2008

down and out

there was nothing to hold
yet you kept clinging
with all your defenses down
merely with pure speculation

even now it is not too late
come on, retrace your steps
retreat to your safe haven
nurse yourself back to life

"just don't expect miracles to mend
your broken heart any time soon"

29 comments:

  1. a broken heart sometimes takes a lifetime to mend.

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  2. I love the language in this one - well said!!

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  3. you know what? I've been to india twice and sometimes I'm so blown away by the similarity of our experience and sentiment given the amazing diversity of our culture and environment.
    i relate so well to your posts!
    keep on writing!

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  4. very well described!
    it's a great little poem.

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  5. What lovely words. Another beautiful poem.

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  6. Excellent as always.......
    Oh and I don't!

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  7. Yep! The only miracle there is time.

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  8. I really like this poem! The frustration of the speaker is obvious and each word is perfect!

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  9. simple and clear...very true!

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  10. Where to expect the miracle and where not to expect...thats the tough question.
    Beautiful poem!

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  11. The first two lines really take you straight into the heart of the poem - nice work!

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  12. I have never tried to write about love, how do you do it so well?

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  13. Your poems are always so moving - this one is no exception, with its opening paradox, and gentle irony. Beauty!

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  14. Very poignant and pragmatic approach.

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  15. Hi Gautami!
    It's always a pleasure to come by and read your poems. They always resonate in very powerful ways.
    (I finally settled on blogging again- hope you can come visit me!)

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  16. Profound....But not the miracle I was hoping for....
    Great writing. Checking lots of your pages.

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  17. You express heartbreak so well! I'm hoping that sometime soon your poems will be a triumph of new hope. Take care of yourself.

    XXX

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  18. Tami! I've missed you on my blog break. I see your poetry continues to bloom. XXOO

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  19. I know that heart break, and I have more than once yearned for a friend to say such things. Beautifully done.

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  20. I like the feel of story ...to me it draws me to the material...

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  21. Lovely and passionate as always.

    Is it my memory playing tricks or didn't you take the bar exam a few weeks back. Hope it went well.

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  22. Oh very tough advice to receive: pull yourself up using your own character.

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  23. beautiful one. At special times one needs miracle to heal the effect !!

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  24. Sometimes a broken heart just doesn't heal. Nice work!

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  25. Nothing says a poem works more than the feeling I get when I say, "Ah, yes, I know that." Not that I'd be able to articulate it as well. Very good.

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  26. I really like the feel of your poem. When you say, " come on, retrace your steps
    retreat to your safe haven
    nurse yourself back to life"
    Beautiful and strong.

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