Saturday 28 June 2008

doorway

I have written a tanka for the first time. Hope I got it right.

I rub my chin
reflectively with the
back of my hand--
each single pore of yours
is doorway to heaven
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# 9:45 pm(India time): I have been participating in a 24 Hour Read-a-thon. You can check my progress here! Hence I have neglected this blog of mine. I have not been visiting you all. I intend to remedy that ASAP!

28 comments:

  1. This poem makes me think we are in many ways a a reflection of those around us--and most significantly of those closest to us at heart. Thanks for sharing this lovely work.

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  2. Your poem highlights how intense the closeness between two people can be.

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  3. Your poem makes me wish I had someone who felt that way about me.

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  4. Wow, I love your take on the prompt! Right on!!! =)

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  5. The rubbing of the chin is often a reflective pose of wondering or decision making... sometimes a hesitancy... to enter the door? Lovely.

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  6. gautama, yours and mine seem to express a similar feeling! Great minds... :)

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  7. Very reflective, yet passionate.

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  8. i think you did very well with the tanka

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  9. Great! I like the reference of your own skin to counter the pores of the other - very intimate in a nonsexual way.

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  10. The narrator truly cares for her lover on every level.
    An excellent love poem
    -Thank You.

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  11. 24 hours reading...you mean in a row?
    24 hrs in a row? woe
    i'd be soooo tired!

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  12. Nice work, as usual! You do well with all forms...

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  13. I think it is wondeful, too.

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  14. Very sensual and sexy! I like how your linked the word "doorway" back to the origibnal post on OSI. Very clever!

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  15. I really enjoy the images this poem generates. Very nice and thought provoking

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  16. that's great. pores, doorway to heaven. nice. very thought provoking.

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  17. oh, I love it. simple, yet it says so much.

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  18. More and more I read in your work words of love and tenderness. Tami, well done.

    love you,Melanie

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  19. Wow! Amazing!
    I can imagine the magnitude of love.:)

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  20. Lovely... I like the physicalness of the expression (not sure how to explain what I mean) - that makes the emotion more intense and real. A read-a-thon sounds like an interesting idea. Hope it was fun.

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  21. an every day initimate moment brought in close for all of us to see... did well g...

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  22. Aw, this is great!

    I know how that feels. :D

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