Sunday, 16 March 2008

numbing nirvana----read write poem/monday poetry train


photo credits: Carmi. Do click on his name or the picture and get to his blog. He takes awesome photos!



brittle branches bent over
with weight of weather,

snow forms a cover over green earth-
protective or damaging,

depending on how one sees.
looking with misted eyes
at hazy images of my neighbourhood trees
standing tall, not giving in to chill;
I think of emerald warmth-

a fleeting image receding as quickly.
shivering a litle,
I shed a few more tears,

which dry on me
by forming icicles.

numbness can only bring nirvana

I am rendered senseless,
my last coherent thoughts being,

"another new day, brightening sun
can only bring new life,
a few leaves on my branches

will make me alive in no time"

before falling apart on hard ground.
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Ride the Monday Poetry train too...

34 comments:

  1. Those branches got to you, too, huh? I don't know if you saw my comment to Carmi, but they made me think (as does your poem, now) of my trip to Yellowstone over New Year's.

    Man, I can't get that trip out of my mind. Seems like you guys have it there, too.

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  2. Beautiful images (photo and poem)...so bittersweet with that last line.

    I like the title, it's from my favorite line.

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  3. i love this one... the symbology is powerful.

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  4. The cold that brings numbness, but for once that numbness is welcome because it seems to be the only way to ease the pain...Love that imaginery.

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  5. This is great:

    'I shed a few more tears,
    which dry on me
    by forming icicles.
    numbness can only bring nirvana'

    And I do love that photo. Love the soft focus background.

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  6. That's a lovely piece, as is Carmi's photo!

    N.

    (and as to your question, I've been incredibly busy with work, with origami, and with watching politics!)

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  7. this piece is excellent.
    great imagery

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  8. Very pretty. Protective or Damaging - nice tension there. The tears forming icicles is a great image.

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  9. cycle of life--timely now that spring is about to be sprung!

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  10. I enjoyed this, specially the emerald warmth and the numbing nirvana

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  11. it makes me think about how distressing winter cold must be if one is a tree...

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  12. Beautiful and so well written!

    P.S. I started a new writing prompts blog if you'd like to participate.

    Jane's Inspirations

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  13. Bravo!!! Simply awesome. Liked the imagery.


    Keep it rollin;)

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  14. Lovely, very bittersweet.

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  15. The reality of life. Have it, and eventually it's not there any more.
    But it's beautiful while it lasts.

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  16. it is all in 'how one sees' isn't it? I keep bumping into that perspective.

    haunting imagery in this.j

    thanx for visiting.

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  17. Gautami, this does cool things down. :)

    I think trees have a lot to teach us, but we refuse to listen.

    Rose

    xo

    P.S. I posted twice more today. ;)

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  18. I also sense in this poem how the power of thought can transform us. Wonderful photo to illustrate your poem.

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  19. You have such a way with bringing words to life. This is a wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing.

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  20. I too loved the same lines as Julia...tears drying and forming icicles is such a wonderful use of words...gorgeous..

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  21. I like how you give this tree a personality! You have some great lines in here!

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  22. Beautiful poem (and wonderful photo). I think we're all ready for spring. :)

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  23. yes...very effective pic to ur poetry......
    montage of words and visual...

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  24. we often take for granted what these trees feel... excellent images and words to it

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  25. Yes, I agree, great imagery here. You have great work. I'd be happy to exchange links.

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  26. The title is what drew me here...and I knew it would be superb.. and it was.

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  27. what a wonderful perspective

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  28. beautiful pictures ... both the photo and the poem.

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  29. Wow, really unique and the last stanza lingers.

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  30. Beautiful - I love the way the winter seems to get more and more unbearable until numbness sets in.

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  31. wonderful tree's lament...

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