why am I seeing it from afar
my hair plastered to my skull
salt sticks into me
that abrasive feeling does not leave
when did my feet get webbed
when did I sprout wings
the ocean sleeps in front of me
sky is running away
that flotsam is a piece of a mountain
the world is unusually calm
while I accept the gift of peace
"I wanted to be the last redwood, now I pirouette with the jinx"
while I accept the gift of peace ... lovely!
ReplyDeletetruly surreal. Your last line is wonderful.
ReplyDeleteThis on is really, REALLY beautiful! You have such a gift with words!
ReplyDeleteThat's quite a last line. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteAn excellent post! A truly surreal piece with a definite and outstanding last line! =)
ReplyDelete-Weasel
I'm trying to find words to describe my reaction to yours. This bypasses my brain and goes directly be my soul.
ReplyDeleteIf we all stood still and just for a moment, became the last redwood, I wonder, would it stop us?
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Beautiful Gautami! I love the hope is this! And I love the new look :)
ReplyDeletePamela
oops! in this!
ReplyDeletePamela
not much to add Gautami....wondeful as usual
ReplyDeletea striking transformation
ReplyDeleteI am pleased to know your work, I like it when I come across good writers, one always finds something to take from it. Nice work
ReplyDeleteBeautiful imagery in this poem, Gautami! I especially loved the questions about webbed feet and sprouting wings. :-)
ReplyDeleteLovely words :3 and so deep^^~
ReplyDeleteAh, the gift of peace. How it stills us.
ReplyDeletePowerful work - your gift of the words is remarkable! A wonderful read, thank you.
ReplyDeleteSimply superb..as usual..I mean you are so much gifted. God bless!
ReplyDelete"salt sticks into me"
ReplyDeleteGREAT line!
You are definitely a positive person! I love that so much!
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely gorgeous words...striking with their meaning. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteFlotsam love that word. I loved this gift of peace.
ReplyDeleteThe peace would indeed be felt through these "bites and bytes" - thank you. Please have a good Monday.
ReplyDeletedaily athens
'I wanted to be the last redwood'...lovely.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading...so original!
ReplyDeleteI thought my stuff was sad. Looks like I'm going to need to turn it up a notch to keep up with you.
ReplyDeletewonderful verse ... particularly love the ocean sleeps in front of me / sky is running away
ReplyDeletethat is a beautiful peace - now when I go to the ocean I will ponder these thoughts of yours
ReplyDeleteThank you and also for the thoughtful invite
I will join on Mondays - tho my old brain may forget
Moon smiles
Very nice, a lot of imagery. I enjoyed reading your verse today. A unique piece indeed.
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by!
Nice to read you again! It sure does calm when one comes to term with peace.Beauty!
ReplyDelete'Why am I seeing it from afar??'
ReplyDeleteCan feel that stillness.
I love the last 2 lines of your poem- truly beautiful words~~~
ReplyDeleteI love to watch those passing clouds which are running away with the sky.
ReplyDeleteVery nice, Tami. :)
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Believe it or not, I have taken videos of fast moving clouds passing by.
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Your last line....Has so much punch. Lovely poem
ReplyDeletewhile I accept the gift of peace...
ReplyDeleteYou are so gifted... wonderful lines my friend- Dear Poetic Friend:
I invite you to join us at Jingle Poetry : http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/, we have a Monday Poetry Potluck party (weekly) for you to enjoy, the link is open American Central Time 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm. You have 48 hours linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem if you don’t have a most updated one handy…
Hope to see you today, please do stop by and check us out.
Let us know when you stop by so that we place your link in our blog list….
Happy Sunday!