my arms around myself won't let me down
I hug myselfshutting everything out-the pain is massivetearing into my guts-my arms around myselfhold me tightso as to I don't fall apart.I squeeze my eyes tight,tearless I staywhy did I ever think I could hold on to something which was never mine in the first place?that ache will be there a long time yet I will stand uprightas my arms won't let me down
I hope this isn't autobiographical! :-) I like the idea you've come up with here.
ReplyDeletethe last line... and the title... so powerful. Triumphant even amidst the ache. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteOh, Gautami. What a sad poem! I, too am trying to write after a dry spell. Doing the prompts seems to help.
ReplyDeleteGood work!
but there is just always
ReplyDeletea smile on your face
that’s something no one can replace
usual you let them to..
In few words you managed to convey the total hopelessness and grief over a broken heart. Powerful.
ReplyDeleteI can feel your grief here. It is so vivid. Nice.
ReplyDeletePamela
very powerful write... words directly from heart...
ReplyDeletevery powerful and forlorn ...
ReplyDeleteNice capture of the experience of loss and grief. Nicely done, Gautami!
ReplyDeleteThe last line was full of hope, a nice turn in the poem.
ReplyDeleteYou really do get it, don't you? The whole poem is powerful, but those last lines are really strong.
ReplyDeleteStrong sense of reality in this poignant piece. Nicely done.
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