Wednesday, 24 March 2010

doing the undoing

I come undone
in totality
when your brazen hunger
nuzzles me
I nuzzle into you
my hunger is not brazenly defined
yet it too totally
does you in
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15 comments:

  1. Lilibeth24 March 2010 at 04:39

    Certainly gets the idea across--wow.

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  2. Andy Sewina24 March 2010 at 07:28

    Beautiful words, I love the way you wrote this!

    <3 Andy

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  3. anthonynorth24 March 2010 at 07:30

    It does indeed. Great words.

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  4. Carina24 March 2010 at 07:52

    Well written, and very strong!

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  5. ThomG24 March 2010 at 07:54

    I really like the heat of this, the obvious desire.

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  6. Lorraine24 March 2010 at 08:56

    I have been missing you, something ghostly this way came....;)

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  7. AnnSecret24 March 2010 at 08:57

    WOW. Despite being an Indian and a Mathematics teacher, you are really really good!

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  8. Ofira Sephiroth24 March 2010 at 09:46

    Great choice of words.

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  9. iamyuva24 March 2010 at 11:50

    wow... eloquent...

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  10. Stan Ski24 March 2010 at 15:02

    A kind of Jack Sprat and his wife scenario, only much more subtly portrayed.

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  11. Greyscale Territory25 March 2010 at 01:22

    A touch of seriousness and a touch of wry humour! Love the mix!

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  12. Dee Martin25 March 2010 at 06:05

    Love the counterpoint - you come undone - he is done in - great stuff!

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  13. Amity25 March 2010 at 15:41

    Wow...this is really an exciting take on the prompt Gautami...I could feel the excitement...:))

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  14. Thomma Lyn25 March 2010 at 18:08

    Oooh, great job -- you portray the passionate cross currents so well. :)

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  15. one more believer26 March 2010 at 15:53

    an exchange without cost...yes, no!!??

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