Saturday, 13 March 2010

a curse or a plea

wherever you move
going this way
or that
the murmur of my sorrow
will haunt you

in your mirror
you will see only me
my smiling facade
turned into its own shadow
will haunt you

I was never there
I will never be there
yet I held a place for a while
in your mind, which
will haunt you

consider it a curse,
or a plea,
I will continue to haunt you
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22 comments:

  1. quid13 March 2010 at 07:29

    The pain and sorrow come out so clearly in your words.

    Beautiful, heartbreaking.

    quid

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  2. J Cosmo Newbery13 March 2010 at 15:21

    No wonder I don't like shaving in the morning.

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  3. rob kistner14 March 2010 at 01:13

    Persistent and taunting -- well written Gautami...
    ...rob

    Here is my murmur...

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  4. anthonynorth14 March 2010 at 01:31

    An excellent chill to this one.

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  5. adreamygal14 March 2010 at 03:30

    thats painfully beautiful !!!

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  6. iamyuva14 March 2010 at 05:09

    i resist..

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  7. Loch Rob14 March 2010 at 06:35

    A lot of pain and sorrow in this one. It appears he thought you were there, and yet all along you were not. Intriguing. Maybe time (and another) heal wounds of the heart.

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  8. SandyCarlson14 March 2010 at 06:43

    So it goes. I have been haunted in this way. You paint an amazing picture here.

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  9. Leo14 March 2010 at 07:10

    yes... this is a sad murmur today.. loved it though.. good one!

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  10. Cynthia14 March 2010 at 07:22

    powerful. almost like a obssesive
    love potion. written very real.

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  11. Maggie14 March 2010 at 11:29

    There might not have been too much of a place in the life but I see you left strong footprints in the mind...well done :)

    http://liquidicemusing.blogspot.com

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  12. swapnap14 March 2010 at 15:26

    silently powerful...it haunts you.

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  13. Robin14 March 2010 at 17:42

    Very powerful...and haunting. I find the last line--consider it a curse, or a plea--intriguing. Well done!

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  14. Stan Ski14 March 2010 at 17:48

    Continue to haunt this space with your words.

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  15. Mojo15 March 2010 at 06:43

    a hauntingly familiar song. or curse. I suspect most of us have a similar ghost. such is the nature of love and loss.

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  16. Sweetest in the Gale15 March 2010 at 07:41

    So much emotion and angst in this poem...you captured that sorrowful feeling beautifully.

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  17. Aayushi Mehta15 March 2010 at 23:58

    We all feel like that sometimes...hurt, and angry!! but you've portrayed the emotions very well...

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  18. Marinela16 March 2010 at 11:27

    An amazing work here, very well done :)

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  19. Tumblewords:17 March 2010 at 11:30

    Perpetual murmuring - and yes, it is haunting.

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  20. sashi18 March 2010 at 16:01

    I can so relate to this its scary! Beautifully written

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  21. Glennis18 March 2010 at 19:03

    well said.

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  22. gabrielle20 March 2010 at 17:53

    ghosts can be so fluid.

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