angelically moving
like a belly dancer
who convolutes to a tune
she draped herself into him
her ethereal presence
formulated certain
gentle feelings
in that stone heart
inching towards his soul
he jack-knifed
knocking her
lovely form aside
as soon moribund
naked emotions
took over
progressing
quantifying
regressing
into sadness
like a heavy tomb
of umbrella.
a vellum fell from sky
walls demolished
x-axis of their love
intersected at y and z-axis.
"Love has to be three dimensional or may be four"
Hello Gautami,
ReplyDeleteA soft, gentle and sad poem. Clever to have had it already written!
Each word works in its place -- great job.
ReplyDeleteClever, witty and fun to read.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed it!
Excellent poem!
ReplyDeletewonderful work, Gautami! and you got the whole alphabet in there as well!!
ReplyDeleteReally impressive.
ReplyDeleteYou are brilliant. You can even write a poem just through alphabet.
ReplyDeleteAwe, everything must intersect somewhere. This is beautiful. Hope your arm is feeling better today.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely abecedarium!
ReplyDeleteYou've recycled words from a previous prompt and made it work.
ReplyDeleteWow...Like all dimensions here
ReplyDeleteI love how you bring your mathematical prowess into play, as well as your words!
ReplyDeleteCan't imagine how you do this, it's awesome, you're very talented, impressively so, arm better today?
ReplyDeleteNice one. And isn't it a good feeling to follow own rules and to succeed at least?
ReplyDeleteBest wishes
Ralf
i would definitely say this fits the bill for our dictionary exercise. this is executed wonderfully, the bolding of alphabetical missives a nice touch. beautifully worded. -lawrence
ReplyDeleteEspecially enjoying the final lines: "x-axis of their love /
ReplyDeleteintersected at y and z-axis."
The entire alphabet! Lovely.
ReplyDeleteLovely! I think your words really leave the reader with a sad, romantic feeling.
ReplyDeletesomewhat sad....another nice poem
ReplyDelete"Love has to be three dimensional or may be four"
ReplyDeleteWell that is taking things ta a whole new level....E=Mc squared.
Loved flowing along with your music in this poem!
ReplyDeleteThis flows as I imagine dancing with my love. (You wove those prompt words in seamlessly.) Well done!
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