anger taking me overI stomp my feet in the mud
where my sandals come off
getting stuck in the muck
barely conscious, I walk barefoot
with an ashen face and
trip on the faulty road
which saves me from getting hit
by an unknown vehicle travelling
at a high speed from the wrong side
unlinear yet in a line,
unmarked dreams ascend
then stop for no apparent reason
suddenly waking up, I sit down
scared to my wits, yet unharmed
for a while I stare at the wall
comprehending nothing
in someway, somewhere in that dream
you can designate a semblance of order
Picture credits: Rick Mobbs
This came out of a dream I had today while taking an afternoon siesta. . Maybe it was a nightmare, I don't know. It was all disjointed. I wrote what I remembered giving it some sort of order. I don't know what to make of it. I mean the interpretation part, not the poetry one. Can anyone? This is another rough draft. I will work on it later.
What I really like here is the immediacy of your words. They put me right into your dream. Great showing instead of telling!
ReplyDeleteYou sketched your dream almost !! Nice one
ReplyDeleteYou thinking of driving again?
ReplyDeleteA confusing dream of places unknown and emotions beneath the outward serenity.
ReplyDeleteHave a great weekend my friend that I love.
is it something like de javu?
ReplyDeleteWell, that is deja vu! And this I on't know what!
ReplyDeleteSome dreams are just so cool.
ReplyDeletethis remind me of the story about Stephen King and how he got hit by a car while walking, you can read about this in his book, On writing
ReplyDeleteanyway, your writing of this dream is so well put, I guess it's easier to interpret reality than dreams
Interesting! I've rarely remembered dreams and when I have they seem to lack enough definition to look for meaning. Neat post!
ReplyDeleteMy, that was a clear dream! Excellent post as always.
ReplyDeleteits good to dream and write I like the painting it looks very original.
ReplyDeleteAh, sounds like you narrowly escaped death because of something you would have called inconvenient. See, you were on your way to death..heavy of feet, ashen of face. Then the lousy road tripped you, and saved your life. Maybe you should be grateful for the frustrations in life; sometimes they may be blessings in disguise.
ReplyDeleteThere. How's that for a philosophical analysis? Or maybe your ate something too spicy and had a crazy dream.
Sounds to me like all these bad things conspired to make one majorly good thing happen. And man, those were some frustrating things, indeed.
ReplyDeletetripping on a faulty road saves you after being angry.. maybe that means you aren't on the right road and need to change your path? OR you ARE on the right road...
ReplyDeleteI have NO idea how to interpret dreams Gautami.. just trying to help
wish i could dream up a good post like you can!
It feels that you caught the essence of the dream--I can see it play out in my mind. Then again, I've been doing too much dreaming lately. Neat picture!
ReplyDeleteInteresting dream maybe it's telling you to look again at something you have brushed aside as a minor inconvenience but will in fact change your life!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you expressed the dream I could imagine it so clearly.
Hmmm. I pick up emotional doing contrasted with order/mechanicalness but then guilt at that emotional freedom/honesty which also saves.This suggests a conflict between what you desire and your duty with you fearing your desire and loving your duty. Being a mother and wanting the freedom of a woman when you value and fear both
ReplyDeleteGautami, I wish that I could help you dissect your dream but, I am not good at that. Sorry. I did however like the way you turned this into a dream poem and how much Rick's picture compliments it. Nice job. Have a nice night.
ReplyDeleteI love your ability to take me to that place in your dream. You work magic with words.
ReplyDeleteWhat a thought provoking dream; and you tell it to us so poetically in your poem. I like this; it's haunting. As for the dream, you have been given the chance once again to start again. Actually you are giving this choice each moment in the gift of free will; but sometimes it takes a fall down to tell us that perhaps we should look at life another way or take another course of direction. You are blessed that fate isn't going to let you completely reck yourself; but don't keep defying the warnings. Peace, Light and Love to you and yours. . . CordieB.
ReplyDeleteI have to say I thought my husband had incrediable dreams, and I have tried to talk him into writing them down, no luck.
ReplyDeletethat's a 'thank god i woke up' kinda dream... very nice writing!
ReplyDeleteI love art and poetry together.
ReplyDeleteGreat job.
I really like this. You can feel the urgency in your words and the clarity of your dream is obvious for all to witness.
ReplyDeleteYour rough drafts out-do my finals all the time. Can't interpret for you but I can say I'm impressed with the content of your dreams.
ReplyDeleteAnger can create death in a person. The "faulty" road, which can symbolize so many negative life experiences (death, illness, etc.) actually returns life to you.
ReplyDeleteThat's my take anyway. I've had many "negative" things happen in my life that actually became blessings in disguise.
Love the way you put the dream into such descriptive words. I could visualize it!
haunting images that blur the line between dream and reality
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