Wednesday, 27 August 2008

making inroads into I know not what


orbs of your eyes suck me into it
I follow that unknown path
in a zombie like state
making inroads into I know not what
if I could write words on the sky
I would at least try that once
but this untread road is one way street.

"believe me, I don't wish to get out of it"
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19 comments:

  1. Donnnnn27 August 2008 at 22:09

    I don't believe in One-Way streets..you can always turn around and go back.

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  2. Art and Poetry28 August 2008 at 00:03

    Unusual poem, well done!

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  3. anthonynorth28 August 2008 at 01:24

    Almost surreal in nature, this one. I liked it.

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  4. paisley28 August 2008 at 04:48

    if the road is still offering you that which is unknown,, i cannot help but feel it is the right one... it is when you know it all and find nothing new,, that one should begin to think about turning around....

    very interesting piece....

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  5. John's comments28 August 2008 at 06:27

    Thanks about the tip off re American Sentences. I have rushed to find out more and have even done one. I tend to do Twitters on things I see so have the raw material for this form of poetry. One more step in learning about poetry!

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  6. Raven's Wing Poetry28 August 2008 at 08:29

    I feel this spoke to me...it speaks to something I am going through right now. It is a one-way street, but for me, one that I suspect I will not want to return from. Thought provoking and profound.

    -Nicole

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  7. tumblewords28 August 2008 at 09:49

    I like this - wondering if one can actually go back, even when the inclination arises.

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  8. Michelle Johnson28 August 2008 at 10:31

    One way streets can take us to interesting places if we're willing to see what's there. And, if you still like what you're seeing then I say don't worry about leaving. Explore to its depths. Nice job. Have a nice day.

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  9. Ghost Particle28 August 2008 at 11:39

    when we go forward, everything is like this. bt then again, by going forward, this is exactly what I face :(

    hey donn...dont turn back on an one way street and go against traffic!!! :P

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  10. Susan Helene Gottfried28 August 2008 at 11:57

    I've known this feeling, myself. There's both fear and excitement with it; I don't want to get out of it, either.

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  11. Deborah Godin28 August 2008 at 12:23

    A beautiful poem; you have plumbed the depths once again!

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  12. Jon Cox28 August 2008 at 12:48

    Wonderful & well said!! :o)

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  13. Linda - Nickers and Ink28 August 2008 at 16:32

    Skillful incorporation of prompts!

    Blessings,
    Linda

    MEME EXPRESS – daily blog prompts

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  14. Beth28 August 2008 at 21:46

    I believe you!
    Thank you for this lovely piece--

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  15. Stan Ski29 August 2008 at 00:42

    Much as I like visiting places I know, there's always a thrill to discovering new places (of any description).

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  16. one more believer29 August 2008 at 09:44

    amazing yes g... untread road is a one way street... a beautiful love story perhaps...

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  17. maekitso31 August 2008 at 01:53

    Have you noticed that time stops on this one way street. How is that we get carried through a space in which time stands still? Great work.

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  18. polona1 September 2008 at 13:28

    unusual but it works very well... love it

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  19. Cynthia2 September 2008 at 23:28

    falling in love with the feeling
    or being of vertigo, not wishing
    to stop the descent.

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