Saturday, 23 August 2008

Senryu: Ruing it?

I tried a senryu after very long. Hope it works!

ideal resolves
very impressive show
bitter to swallow



24 comments:

  1. a bitter pill to swallow indeed. good lines these. :)

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  2. Very nice, enjoyed the subtlety the form demands - I sure think you nailed it!

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  3. I think you were very successful in the senryu. It is a new look at an old phase.

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  4. I agree with all your previous visitors. Very well done and oh so real. Thanks.

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  5. Just a reminder that your OSI prompt, spectacles, is up next week. Please let me know if this works for you!

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  6. No matter how hard I try, I have great difficulty writing these forms. In this I'm afraid I lack the resolve.

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  7. This type is new to me and it is beautiful!

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  8. Hey Gautami, I like it! That's why I don't do New Years' Resolutions. I like sugar pills.
    ..

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  9. Yes, ideals often look great on paper, and turn into nightmares when implemented-this was the twentieth century.
    Thank you for sharing this.

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  10. New Year's Day
    I can't break the habit
    of resolution

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  11. Very nice!
    Being a list maker, I have much experience with resolve. It is not always bitter.

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  12. Oh, i know this one! Very nice.

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  13. Senryu, a new learning for me; from a human viewpoint rather than nature. There are many bitter pills hidden from view. Lovely.

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  14. Great pen, straight on! Thank you!

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  15. I'm not sure how it works technically, but it jumped right out at me. Excellent!!

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  16. ..a very apt comment on human nature..many thanks..

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  17. love the comments..i agree w/all of them!!

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  18. yes. I'd say it works!
    thanks so much!

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