coldness seeps into him almost burning his skin after that intense heat
he turns towards it welcoming it
he puts out his hand, snatching it back again
why can't he feel anything in his fingers
he tries to open his eyes, finds only holes there
why is he smelling burnt wood powderded to charcoal
concentrating hard enough, he faces the inevitable truth
death can only have only colour, which is amalgamation of all others
his cremation could only come after he had died from drowning
That was really nice twist at the end. A pretty novel idea.
ReplyDeleteAnother great surprise there.
ReplyDeleteThis gave me goosebumps!
ReplyDeleteWhow! Sinister, and good! Great ending.
ReplyDeleteLove the twist. But, of course! Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteVery dark. I love the shifting between fire and water, heat and cold.
ReplyDeleteCremation and Drowning has created a wonderful tug of war for my imagination.
ReplyDeleteLove it.
Confusion, realisation. Quite a sinister atmosphere to it, but the inevitable is taken so casually.
ReplyDeleteThe style of this one works for me.
Its very creative and original
ReplyDeleteAlways a twist in the tail........
ReplyDeleteVery intense viewpoint.
ReplyDeleteThis certainly holds one's attention! Fine tension between heat and cold.
ReplyDeletePretty intense. Interesting possibilities without punctuation.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully dark and so imotive. A gem.
ReplyDeletemy skin crawls!
ReplyDeletevery vivid
ReplyDeleteThat is superb. "Half a poem," eh? Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteYikes! Creepy. nice image!
ReplyDeletescary!!
ReplyDeletenice attempt but :)