I rub my chin
reflectively with the
back of my hand--
each single pore of yours
is doorway to heaven
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reflectively with the
back of my hand--
each single pore of yours
is doorway to heaven
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# 9:45 pm(India time): I have been participating in a 24 Hour Read-a-thon. You can check my progress here! Hence I have neglected this blog of mine. I have not been visiting you all. I intend to remedy that ASAP!
This poem makes me think we are in many ways a a reflection of those around us--and most significantly of those closest to us at heart. Thanks for sharing this lovely work.
ReplyDeleteYour poem highlights how intense the closeness between two people can be.
ReplyDeleteYour poem makes me wish I had someone who felt that way about me.
ReplyDeleteCertainly interesting.
ReplyDeleteWow, I love your take on the prompt! Right on!!! =)
ReplyDeleteThe rubbing of the chin is often a reflective pose of wondering or decision making... sometimes a hesitancy... to enter the door? Lovely.
ReplyDeletegautama, yours and mine seem to express a similar feeling! Great minds... :)
ReplyDeleteVery reflective, yet passionate.
ReplyDeletei think you did very well with the tanka
ReplyDeleteyes, this is well done. :)
ReplyDeleteoh yeah - love.
ReplyDeleteGreat! I like the reference of your own skin to counter the pores of the other - very intimate in a nonsexual way.
ReplyDeleteYep, that's a tanka.
ReplyDeleteThe narrator truly cares for her lover on every level.
ReplyDeleteAn excellent love poem
-Thank You.
24 hours reading...you mean in a row?
ReplyDelete24 hrs in a row? woe
i'd be soooo tired!
good to hear from you
ReplyDeleteI think it is wonderful!
ReplyDeleteNice work, as usual! You do well with all forms...
ReplyDeleteI think it is wondeful, too.
ReplyDeleteVery sensual and sexy! I like how your linked the word "doorway" back to the origibnal post on OSI. Very clever!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy the images this poem generates. Very nice and thought provoking
ReplyDeletethat's great. pores, doorway to heaven. nice. very thought provoking.
ReplyDeleteoh, I love it. simple, yet it says so much.
ReplyDeleteMore and more I read in your work words of love and tenderness. Tami, well done.
ReplyDeletelove you,Melanie
Wow! Amazing!
ReplyDeleteI can imagine the magnitude of love.:)
Lovely... I like the physicalness of the expression (not sure how to explain what I mean) - that makes the emotion more intense and real. A read-a-thon sounds like an interesting idea. Hope it was fun.
ReplyDeletean every day initimate moment brought in close for all of us to see... did well g...
ReplyDeleteAw, this is great!
ReplyDeleteI know how that feels. :D