Saturday, 7 June 2008

witchcraft

a silent horn was blowing from a distant land
tearing at her innards, wrenching it out.
when she woke up she was drenched in cold sweat
a chant escaped from her lips, the meaning as yet
unclear. her lilting voice carried outside
making her mother run towards her. that trance
like state was nothing anyone had seen before.

her skin so translucent, nose so feral- was enough
to scare anyone who had known her all her life
when she got up, her gown fell apart. unconscious
to her nakedness, she walked towards the centre
of the house, sitting herself ramrod straight
chanting in an unknown language of bygone era
aura of her bare body did not let anyone near her

a painfully shy girl who barely mixed with anyone
the only question within everyone's mind was
what had brought on this unexpected change
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14 comments:

  1. Don Iannone7 June 2008 at 06:12

    could be the start of a long story. where did this one come from, gautami?

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  2. anthonynorth7 June 2008 at 14:43

    Now this has got to continue.

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  3. keith hillman7 June 2008 at 15:38

    Great but it suddenly stopped! More please.

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  4. Stan Ski7 June 2008 at 17:44

    I agree with the previous comments. The suden ending was the unexpected part.

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  5. Donn7 June 2008 at 19:59

    Another witch had cast a 'couple buster' or 'retrieve a lover' spell NO wait..maybe someone hired another witch to get even.

    She was supposed to walk straight over to the well in the centre of the village and jump in!

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  6. Tammy7 June 2008 at 21:36

    Tami this was beautiful and I too would love more. ;)

    I was commenting here as I got your SS comment...cool. ;)

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  7. Linda Jacobs8 June 2008 at 05:38

    This is like the prologue to a novel! Captivating!

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  8. polona8 June 2008 at 10:38

    how mysterious! like others, i would like to know more...

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  9. shubd8 June 2008 at 23:57

    Now that's a cliffhanger if there was one !!

    Brilliant start and your audience is clamoring for more !!

    Hope you WILL do the expected ! :)


    Thanks for stopping by.

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  10. rebecca9 June 2008 at 08:15

    guatami, that was awesome...where did you ever extract this from? excellent...

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  11. Rambler9 June 2008 at 09:15

    actually I am not sure if I got the whole intent of the poem...a dumb me I guess

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  12. Robin10 June 2008 at 01:45

    Wonderful Gautami, is there more? This has harbingers of a cracking good tale.

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  13. Jeques20 June 2008 at 00:39

    Every now and then, an idea comes along that works really well. This one does. This is mystical.

    I wish you well.

    ~ Jeques

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  14. sister AE21 June 2008 at 20:43

    This is quite eerie. I like the clear images it paints.

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